Graduate / SOP Review for Grad School application. Mechnical Engineer applying for MS Computer Science at NYU [6]

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Just to inquire, have you taken any subject test apart from general GRE test? I am also planning to change stream but not sure if I am allowed to do that without subjective GRE test.

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Graduate / SOP Review for Grad School application. Mechnical Engineer applying for MS Computer Science at NYU [6]

@kgadhave Thanks for the information. Not me but my one of my friends want to switch from E&C to computer Science.
He has GRE - 301
TOEFL - 91
92% Aggregate in undergrads and 16 month experience as application developer in a product based company(Oracle India) in Bangalore.

How would you evaluate his profile?

Letters / He has always been consistent and punctual in classes. LoR on behalf of Mathematics teacher. [11]

Letter of Recommendation 1
Hi, Please help me evaluate if different skills are highlighted in these 3 different LoRs:
I am happy to recommend Mr. Name as a candidate for higher studies at your esteemed university. As a <Designation> in Department of Information Science and Engineering, I have known him since 2nd year of the program. Calibrating his performance, I will place him in top 5% among the students in the class. Name has many distinguishing elements in his character as an individual.

As a teacher, I taught subjects like object orientated programming (Oops), data mining, and system architecture and file structures to him. I was impressed by his strong data structure and algorithm building skills during lab sessions. It shows that he has firm commands on data structures and radiates profound technical knowledge.

Name handle and act reasonably in stress mixed circumstances. He does have sense of prioritising the works based on severity. I believe him having inbuilt tendency to use presence of mind. It would be noteworthy to narrate that during semester examination, but he was under stress due to family problem. He managed to overcome family issue without having its toll in his performance on his subject. The way he sort out things is appreciable and it also assures that he would take up the further study with seriousness. His actions sounded him a passionate student to achieve career in Information Technology field.

Individually, he is a jovial person having moderate temperament. Name has good soft skills and his interaction with teachers and classmates illustrated that he is capable of connecting to people. I am positive about his decision for master program and wish him best of luck.

Letter of Recommendation 2 [..]

Letter of Recommendation 3
I know Mr. full Name, as an under graduate student in Information Science and Engineering Department. I have handled the courses of Fundamentals of computing, both theory and lab session and was also his project guide during fourth year. His conduct and behaviour has been brilliant and he has open deportment to participate in the activities conducted in the college. He has an amicable disposition making him approachable and easy to communicate with. As he was my student, I can confidently state that he has maintained a good academic record throughout.

My observation as his teacher reveals that he is very attentive, sincere, regular and hard working student with a tremendous drive to fulfil his tasks which shows his interest and zeal towards the subject. He had always actively participated in classroom discussions. He is a keen observer and has the requisite aptitude to take up any difficult assignment in his field of study.

While working on final year project I found he considers minute details deliberately. The project was ... based on data mining. Needless to say, the project was huge success with great work done by Name and his teammates. His work depicted his coding zeal. As I perceive from those 10 months of the project work, it will be noteworthy to add that he has strong coding skill with cognitive analytical reasoning skill. I must mention that he is capable of executing the task single handed if required. He was in one of the few students to be awarded S grade (Outstanding performance) in final year project.

He has spontaneous power of communication that precludes any possibility of a communication gap and I can rate his communication skills as excellent, which he evidenced during project discussion by elaborating his ideas eloquently. In addition, he has a good hand at both written and spoken English and also has pleasing manners. He is sociable by nature and is liked by all staff members of the department and has an excellent character and conduct.

He was involved and excelled in various extra curriculum activities. He reflected his potential in taking leadership in conducting Competition1 Workshop organised by Center for cloud Computing & Big Data. He has also been successful in Competition2, a coding competition organised by our college.

He is lively, attentive and punctual. I would rate him in the top 10% among his peers. I can strongly recommend him without any reservation for admission to graduate studies in your institution and I'm sure he'll excel in your institution. I wish him good luck for his success.

Looking towards making my LoRs strong enough to be not rejected.

Letters / He has always been consistent and punctual in classes. LoR on behalf of Mathematics teacher. [11]

Would it be worth to mention that I was discussing algorithm development with my math teachers, as the missing example of logical reasoning in second LoR?

Graduate / Evaluate profile for MS in Data Science Fall 2017 [5]

Hi please evaluate these two sections:
Introduction:
I am applying to the MS in computer science program and to do research on the advanced concepts in areas of Data mining and Machine Learning. Bases on my experience at a Data science based institutes helped me realised the urge to improve my skills as this is emerging research field and holds promises for Information Technology sector. Five years down the line I want to be known by my work as an adept and successful data scientist. Further in future I want to start-up my own company purely based on data solving.

Research:
My major field of interest lies in data mining and machine learning. These being hot topics in the current market, will certainly provide me with ample challenging problems, which I would love to handle with gratitude. My final year project was Semi-Supervised learning for Imbalanced Classification. It aims at developing an algorithm that uses small amount of labeled and larger amount of unlabeled data. However, the uniqueness to the classification designed is that it does not assume balance between positive and negative samples in the data-set unlike other techniques. The project firstly provide ideas on principal of machine learning and updated with extant techniques and methods. Having said that specifically, I want to work on classifiers. While reading voraciously on recent research papers on machine learning, it was upsetting to find that absence of a best method to design ensembles classifier which can include multiple learning features at a stretch, is causing serious hindrance in growth and development of machine learning applications.

Letters / He has always been consistent and punctual in classes. LoR on behalf of Mathematics teacher. [11]

Please evaluate:

As a professor of Information science and engineering department I am delighted to recommend ABC for masters program in your esteemed university. I know him since first semester. I have taught him fundamental of computing and computer graphics with OpenGL. My close association with students allows me to take this opportunity to unfold his attributes to you in and outside of the classroom.

I could recollect lucidly that ABC was one of few students who coded his first computer program in the first class of mine for the batch. They had no prerequisite knowledge of computer programming and its structure. Initially, I was uncertain and hesitating about his performance in future as he was learning coding first time. However, his keen interest and comprehension of the subject both theoretically and practically towards the semester end had taken me aback. His swiftness in perusal of the subject released my assumption and made me realize the fact that true zest towards education can break highest bound of prior unfamiliarity. I must highlight that hereafter he had have maintained good grades in all coding oriented subjects. It reveals his skills in several folds. It clearly tells that he is industrious and hardworking, and he is quick to grasp things given opportunities and resources and adaptable. It also indicates that he not only studies the subject but also leaves none stone upturned by working hard in and out of the classroom. He has mastered the proficiency at gaining quality education by utilising inquisitive and interrogative means.

Often during laboratory sessions we had opted for surprise tests and quizzes. Throughout ABC showed consistent staging. Semester end project "Face tracking system using OpenCV" was a curriculum part of Computer Graphics with OpenGL. He executed the projected from analysing till programming single handed. Though doing such laborious and research oriented project demands ample time and activities such collecting sample real time data, neutralising environmental effects, he attended the classes regularly. It strongly suggests that he is punctual, persistent and dedicated student as well as a person with accurate sense of time management and highly motivated. Technically the project was completed considering minute details and possibility. The algorithm designed by him has a success to failure ratio of 9:1 and was able to detect face in different real time impacts such as variations in lighting, poses, illumination and presence of noise. The project outcome implied that he is capable to peruse and implement his learning effectively and efficiently. It also signifies his potential to be a good researchers and promising student for higher studies.

It would be certainly sensible to add that ABC is candid and collaborating. He was mostly seen helping his friends in the task assigned and elaborating how to apply abstract concepts pragmatically. It was unusual to find him in his own desk during laboratory sessions. In addition, his interactions with his classmates and staff members tell his generous nature towards others. He has enriched soft skills including communication skill. He presents the idea in succinctly yet completely. Being an attentive listener, he was never found impulsive in his answers be it in classroom or laboratory or seminar hall.

I am glad to know that ABC has taken decision to pursue higher studies because his curiosity towards technology will barely keep him from learning and growing as a constant learner. I am certain that ABC has ability to become excellent graduate student and professional. He has potential to accept, bring and modify change in every aspect of life. I wish him best wishes.

Letters / He has always been consistent and punctual in classes. LoR on behalf of Mathematics teacher. [11]

Hi Holt,
Thanks for your points. But, I think wording can be improved to some extend. Can you please help me with that?