ryantan1121
Sep 5, 2009
Undergraduate / "Out of difficulties, makes miracle" (Purdue University essay) [10]
Please help me.I am not very good in English but i have tried my best to write the statement below. Help me to improve it and I will be very appreciate it. I need to post it within these few days.
What is the best advice you have ever received? Describe how it has helped you and how you have used it.
During the January of last year, I had further my study into my current college. I was first enrolled into an Intensive English Course due to my poor predominate of English Language. As I only took 2 subjects in the first semester, I had lots of free time in my time table. I thought I could easily handle the subjects and started to follow my new friends to play computer games. As I did not study consistently, I did not score well for those subjects. I felt disheartened at the very first time, but I did not reflect on my mistake and soon the situation became worsens. I continued to play during the semester 2. I started to regret when I ended up with 2 subjects failed. My CGPA had fallen to 2.02!
I felt ashamed to face my parents who have large expectation on me. I was very remorse and regret as that was all due to my persistent and arrogant. I thought my father would be very indignant and punish me. When I showed my results, my father did not scold me and even angry with me. He put his hand on my shoulder and told me a Chinese proverb which means"Out of difficulties, makes miracle". He explained to me that no matter what difficulties we faced, if we can work harder and harder to overcome it, even thing that is impossible will also ended up with miracle.
I learned from that and I always bear it in my mind. I started to change myself and working hard for my study. I aimed to enroll into a good university with minimum requirement CGPA of 3. I knew it was difficult for me to achieve this target, but I chose to work harder. After the third semester ended, I successfully to pass both subjects and even got A- in the subject that I failed with D+ last semester. I finally brought up my CGPA into 2.79.
Semester 5 was last semester in which I needed to apply for university for spring 2010. After calculation, I needed to get at least GPA of 3.50 to get 3.00 in my CGPA. Apparently, it was hard to get it. In spite of that, I did not give up and study everyday very hardly. I prepared every subject with all my efforts. After the semester, it was unbelievable that I get the GPA of 3.44. Although my CGPA finally had just rise to 2.99, I think I had done the best I could. My father's advice had inspired me a lots and I think that is the best advice I ever received before. With that, I had shown improvement of CGPA from 2.02 to 2.99. Thanks to my dad. "Out of difficulties, makes miracle", it will be miracle when you believe it.
Please help me.I am not very good in English but i have tried my best to write the statement below. Help me to improve it and I will be very appreciate it. I need to post it within these few days.
What is the best advice you have ever received? Describe how it has helped you and how you have used it.
During the January of last year, I had further my study into my current college. I was first enrolled into an Intensive English Course due to my poor predominate of English Language. As I only took 2 subjects in the first semester, I had lots of free time in my time table. I thought I could easily handle the subjects and started to follow my new friends to play computer games. As I did not study consistently, I did not score well for those subjects. I felt disheartened at the very first time, but I did not reflect on my mistake and soon the situation became worsens. I continued to play during the semester 2. I started to regret when I ended up with 2 subjects failed. My CGPA had fallen to 2.02!
I felt ashamed to face my parents who have large expectation on me. I was very remorse and regret as that was all due to my persistent and arrogant. I thought my father would be very indignant and punish me. When I showed my results, my father did not scold me and even angry with me. He put his hand on my shoulder and told me a Chinese proverb which means"Out of difficulties, makes miracle". He explained to me that no matter what difficulties we faced, if we can work harder and harder to overcome it, even thing that is impossible will also ended up with miracle.
I learned from that and I always bear it in my mind. I started to change myself and working hard for my study. I aimed to enroll into a good university with minimum requirement CGPA of 3. I knew it was difficult for me to achieve this target, but I chose to work harder. After the third semester ended, I successfully to pass both subjects and even got A- in the subject that I failed with D+ last semester. I finally brought up my CGPA into 2.79.
Semester 5 was last semester in which I needed to apply for university for spring 2010. After calculation, I needed to get at least GPA of 3.50 to get 3.00 in my CGPA. Apparently, it was hard to get it. In spite of that, I did not give up and study everyday very hardly. I prepared every subject with all my efforts. After the semester, it was unbelievable that I get the GPA of 3.44. Although my CGPA finally had just rise to 2.99, I think I had done the best I could. My father's advice had inspired me a lots and I think that is the best advice I ever received before. With that, I had shown improvement of CGPA from 2.02 to 2.99. Thanks to my dad. "Out of difficulties, makes miracle", it will be miracle when you believe it.