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Name: Ahmad Aries Fathullah
Joined: Oct 9, 2017
Last Post: Oct 12, 2017
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School: Institut Teknologi Sepuluh Nopember

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ariesfathullah   
Oct 9, 2017
Scholarship / Chevening Essay - Networking in Startups [3]

Hello, this is the essay that I plan to submit for the Chevening networking question.
I would greatly appreciate your time to review and feedbacks towards this essay.
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networking means a lot to me



Networking for me is a give and take process that allows all the parties involved to get the best from each other.
During my work in [AAA], I was appointed by our CEO to become the project leader for a joint project with my almamater [BBB]. The project's goal was to share our knowledge in game development with [BBB] students and initiate a good relationship with [BBB] by creating mobile games together. For this endeavor, I had to bridge our Japanese CEO with lecturers from two department in [BBB] during the project, each with their own work culture and expectation. It was my responsibility to understand each of them and ensure that the good will from each side got properly delivered throughout the project. That's the important lesson that I take to heart when connecting with others.

Later on when I work in [CCC], I tried to connect the company with the lecturer that I worked with before. I'd been able to convince my CEO to initiate a meeting with [BBB] lecturer and a group of students despite his initial doubt about what benefit it would give to the company. Although there's no further joint project made from that meeting, we do successfully recruit one of the student to our company. Later on, we found out that he's amongst the best talent we ever had. I realize that connecting available networks can help to gain unexpected benefit for parties involved.

Further in my career, I find out that it is very important to maintain and expand the network one has. That's why I actively attend reunions and various IT developer events. Being involved in startup community in [MyCity] also help expanding my network, especially with those that works in IT industry. My startup team has joined multiple incubation programme such as [111], [222] and [333]. Amongst the people I met from those events and programmes, some I had the opportunity to meet again in a more personal meetup. And then from these meetups, some I had the opportunities to collaborate with.

From what I've learned so far, having the right skill and knowing the right people can open up the right opportunity. That's why studying abroad and being a part of Chevening network will open up that opportunity to me. Ultimately, what I will gain from Chevening will greatly helps me to realize my dream to build a coworking space in [MyCity]. I want to build a startup community in that area by becoming a bridge that connects local talents with global opportunities.
ariesfathullah   
Oct 12, 2017
Scholarship / My vision into the reality. Chevening: leadership and influence essay [6]

Zaheen, the first glaring thing from your essay is the lack of period. It was as though your paragraph is a single long winded sentence, which may make it difficult for the reader to get your main point.

I feel that throughout your essay, it doesn't convey your networking skills enough. You can expand the 2nd paragraph to further improve your essay. How did you know these people? Listing a few cases/stories of your startup work that connect with the organizations and communities will surely help to convey your networking skill.

Lastly, your closing paragraph didn't show about how you can use your networking skills to influence the community. It also lacks an explanation about how would you will engage with the Chevening community upon your arrival.
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