Matt360
Oct 26, 2018
Scholarship / "My passion for technology in Africa" We want to hear what excites you MasterCard scholarship [3]
kindly review the essay and give me some advice on how i can further improve on it. I have a feeling the essay is badly written and constructive criticism will really help me work on my next draft.
Question:
We want to hear what excites you and what you are passionate about. Please write about a topic that is important to you and how this reflects your personal values
Answer:
A strong sense of purpose has been the driving force behind my determination. I had a preconceived notion that purpose was something could only be found and not created. I ignored what I was truly passionate about in search of something that would help me fit into my society. Realizing the impact that I aim to have on my community and how the use of innovative technology can help me achieve this, gave me the courage to overcame the urge to fit in. I pursued my passion for computer programming and even went as far as teaching myself how to program computers. Living in Africa, every challenge I see around me reminds me of the quote "Every problem is an opportunity in disguise". I am amazed at just how much programming has evolved my mindset. I see so much opportunity around me and I am constantly thinking of ways to use my skills to solve these challenges.
My main focus lies in the joining of technology and biology. I am really optimistic about how effective use of technology will result in disease prevention and eradication. In line with this, I have been working on a lot of technology-based projects, one being creating a website to display health statistics in Africa. As a source of inspiration, I discussed the idea with some colleagues from a start-up accelerator program called BongoHive. I am really passionate about creating a society that embraces technology and I'm constantly taking small steps to accomplish this goal.
Word limit is 250
kindly review the essay and give me some advice on how i can further improve on it. I have a feeling the essay is badly written and constructive criticism will really help me work on my next draft.
Question:
We want to hear what excites you and what you are passionate about. Please write about a topic that is important to you and how this reflects your personal values
Answer:
Mixing Biology And Technology
A strong sense of purpose has been the driving force behind my determination. I had a preconceived notion that purpose was something could only be found and not created. I ignored what I was truly passionate about in search of something that would help me fit into my society. Realizing the impact that I aim to have on my community and how the use of innovative technology can help me achieve this, gave me the courage to overcame the urge to fit in. I pursued my passion for computer programming and even went as far as teaching myself how to program computers. Living in Africa, every challenge I see around me reminds me of the quote "Every problem is an opportunity in disguise". I am amazed at just how much programming has evolved my mindset. I see so much opportunity around me and I am constantly thinking of ways to use my skills to solve these challenges.
My main focus lies in the joining of technology and biology. I am really optimistic about how effective use of technology will result in disease prevention and eradication. In line with this, I have been working on a lot of technology-based projects, one being creating a website to display health statistics in Africa. As a source of inspiration, I discussed the idea with some colleagues from a start-up accelerator program called BongoHive. I am really passionate about creating a society that embraces technology and I'm constantly taking small steps to accomplish this goal.
Word limit is 250
