Jen Shin
Aug 13, 2020
Writing Feedback / WRITING TASK 2 (CAUSE AND SOLUTION) - A LOTS OF HIGHLY QUALIFIED GRADUATES WITHOUT EMPLOYMENT [3]
Hi everyone, please give me some advices to improve my writing. Thank you ^^
Topic:
WHAT FACTORS MAY HAVE CAUSED THIS SITUATION AND WHAT, IN YOUR OPINION, CAN/ SHOULD BE DONE ABOUT IT?
In recent years, there are lots of people who do not have jobs in spite of the graduations of excellent qualifications. However, I do believe that there are many factors contribute to this problem and some solutions are suggested to rectify this situation
To tackle the problem, we should concentrate on the causes of this issue. First of all, the number of people who are finding jobs increases in these days, so they need to be competitive with each other. If there are one hundred applicants and only one of them is hired, it could cause the problem of unemployment for the others. In addition, the individuals having experience and social skills would have higher opportunities to apply for the jobs than the students who have just graduated without work experience. For example, there are many universities which focus on widening knowledge and theories instead of helping students get used to with what they would do in the future. Therefore, less of them have chance to work on their social skills and approach future careers. Thus, this is the problem that many countries should pay attention to and find ways to solve it.
There are some solutions are suggested for this issue. In term of the educational conditions, the schools should help students develop communication skills in order to get used to with job interviews after graduating. And, the students should be encouraged to have part-time jobs while they are studying to have more experiences. However, the most important factor to tackle this problem is how these students improve themselves before applying for the jobs. They need to prepare knowledge, social skills and be positive in order to prove their efforts to the employers who could hire them.
In conclusion, there are many factors cause this problem, despite some suggested solutions, I believe that the most essential suggestion for this problem is how students improve themselves after graduating and finding jobs.
Hi everyone, please give me some advices to improve my writing. Thank you ^^
Topic:
IN MANY COUNTRIES TODAY THERE ARE MANY HIGHLY QUALIFIED GRADUATES WITHOUT EMPLOYMENT
WHAT FACTORS MAY HAVE CAUSED THIS SITUATION AND WHAT, IN YOUR OPINION, CAN/ SHOULD BE DONE ABOUT IT?
In recent years, there are lots of people who do not have jobs in spite of the graduations of excellent qualifications. However, I do believe that there are many factors contribute to this problem and some solutions are suggested to rectify this situation
To tackle the problem, we should concentrate on the causes of this issue. First of all, the number of people who are finding jobs increases in these days, so they need to be competitive with each other. If there are one hundred applicants and only one of them is hired, it could cause the problem of unemployment for the others. In addition, the individuals having experience and social skills would have higher opportunities to apply for the jobs than the students who have just graduated without work experience. For example, there are many universities which focus on widening knowledge and theories instead of helping students get used to with what they would do in the future. Therefore, less of them have chance to work on their social skills and approach future careers. Thus, this is the problem that many countries should pay attention to and find ways to solve it.
There are some solutions are suggested for this issue. In term of the educational conditions, the schools should help students develop communication skills in order to get used to with job interviews after graduating. And, the students should be encouraged to have part-time jobs while they are studying to have more experiences. However, the most important factor to tackle this problem is how these students improve themselves before applying for the jobs. They need to prepare knowledge, social skills and be positive in order to prove their efforts to the employers who could hire them.
In conclusion, there are many factors cause this problem, despite some suggested solutions, I believe that the most essential suggestion for this problem is how students improve themselves after graduating and finding jobs.
