Graduate / Short statement of purpose for RSM MSc about entrepreneurship and Climate Change. [2]

The SOP size is limited. I have space for one or two more sentences only. I'd be happy to receive some feedback!
I had to answer the question: Why do you want to study this master and why at RSM?

"I believe in the power of the youth and the possibility of change for the betterment of society. I also believe that private companies including startups are agents of this change and that they can influence the evolution of our climate. Here are my reasons for applying to the MSc in Strategic Entrepreneurship. I trust that it will provide me with a well-rounded knowledge in the main areas of business creation.

RSM caught my attention for several reasons. The first one being its location. Rotterdam is home to a culturally diverse as well as dynamic population. Living in Montreal and Singapore for the past 4 years, immersing myself in different cultures, I realized how enriching those experiences were, and I want to further experience the unknown and the diversity of a culture.

The second reason for my application to RSM is the Entrepreneurial mindset of the university, as well as the city itself. The Erasmus Center for Entrepreneurship is proof of the empowerment of entrepreneurs in which I would like to participate. Also, Rotterdam is a hub in which I believe I will have opportunities to exchange and meet people with whom I share a vision."

Let me know what you think.