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Aug 3, 2024
Writing Feedback / Task 1 - The chart below gives information about the age of women in Australia had a baby [2]
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The given bar chart illustrates the data about the age of women in Australia when they had a baby for the first time in 1966, 1986 and 2006.
Overall, the number of first-time pregnancies after age 30 is rising, while first births before age 24 are declining. First-time births between ages 25 and 29 have been fluctuating.
In 1996, over a third of individuals under 20 had a baby, while in the most recent year this dropped to just over 10%. Initially, the most common age group for pregnancy was 20 to 24, constituting over three-fifths of pregnancies. Over 100 years, this number significantly decreased to 30% by the final year. In 1966, fewer than 40% of individuals aged 25 to 29 had their first child. This number increased to 50% in 1986 and dropped to around 40% in 2006.
The percentage of women aged 30 to 34 giving birth for the first time increased slowly from 12% to 19% in the first 20 years. It then sharply jumped to about 50% in 2006, making it the most common age group for first-time mothers. The percentage of first-time mothers aged 35 to 39 increased from less than 10% to 30%. For those 40 and older, having a first baby remained the least common, with only 5% in 2006.
Hi! Thank you for spending time taking care of my essay. I have to take a test in the end of September, this test may decide my future university. It is very important to me, If you can, please give me errors and explanations, so that I can improve my writting skill. Sorry for not upload an image for this essay, but I can make sure that I reported correct data from the given diagram.
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The given bar chart illustrates the data about the age of women in Australia when they had a baby for the first time in 1966, 1986 and 2006.
Overall, the number of first-time pregnancies after age 30 is rising, while first births before age 24 are declining. First-time births between ages 25 and 29 have been fluctuating.
In 1996, over a third of individuals under 20 had a baby, while in the most recent year this dropped to just over 10%. Initially, the most common age group for pregnancy was 20 to 24, constituting over three-fifths of pregnancies. Over 100 years, this number significantly decreased to 30% by the final year. In 1966, fewer than 40% of individuals aged 25 to 29 had their first child. This number increased to 50% in 1986 and dropped to around 40% in 2006.
The percentage of women aged 30 to 34 giving birth for the first time increased slowly from 12% to 19% in the first 20 years. It then sharply jumped to about 50% in 2006, making it the most common age group for first-time mothers. The percentage of first-time mothers aged 35 to 39 increased from less than 10% to 30%. For those 40 and older, having a first baby remained the least common, with only 5% in 2006.