Writing Feedback / IELTS writing task 2- opinion essay on physical and mental strength [2]

Q. Some people think that physical strength is important for success in sport, while other people think that mental strength is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Both physical and mental strength is important for sports undoubtedly. Without both strengths, flow of the sport can be damaged. Physical strength is vital for sports. Mental strength is necessary for defeating the opponent.

A person has to train him or her physically fit for being in a sport. Strength is important for movements of limbs. It gives the muscle the energy to perform a sport perfectly. Such as for gymnastics one has to be physically strong otherwise they might break a bone. Because for the balance and the movements of feet and hands, you need the strength to perform better. Basketball has the same thing as gymnastics.

On the other hand, some sports need the only mental strength to move on. Such as chess. Chess needs only the mental strength to defeat the opponent. One has to play that with strategy. Only brain power is required for this kind of sport. Swimming is a sport with both physical and mental strength. One has to learn the techniques of swimming and also need the mental strength to finish the lap within the time limit in a competition.

There are also other sports which needs physical and mental strength such as badminton, tennis, table tennis. In this kind of sports if you lose focus, you will lose. If focus is stable you will win.

In conclusion, Physical and mental strength both is equally important almost in all sports. Some is exception but in my opinion it depends on the type of sports with which one is required the most.

Writing Feedback / IELTS writing task 2- difference between working from home and working in office. [3]

also discuss differences in comfort, productivity and social interaction.
Working from home and working in an office atmosphere is a different experience. Both have differences in relaxation, productivity and socialization. As for speaking of comfort, home has the most of it. Remote jobs, freelancing and e-media jobs can be executed from home. One can have his or her own schedule to finish the work. Moreover, one can have balanced work and life. In an office environment , an employee has to maintain a tight schedule and finish a job within a deadline which makes life uncomfortable. They don't have flexibility for the assignment. Such as youtuber Mark Rober once worked as a scientist in NASA but after quitting NASA, he is a successful youtuber who's making educational videos from home.

Home can make someone more productive but office can make someone less productive. Some countries have taken initiative for switching up to hybrid jobs so that they can work from home as well as from the office .That allows an employee to be productive enough, but full time office work can make someone tiresome. On the other hand, working from home can give you some rest and make him or her productive again.

Social interaction can be perfectly performed in the office. Because a person can see a person face to face. They can build up good relations and strong teams. Socialization can be heavily developed from physical conduct. In the home setting, you can't have that much connection. So social relationships are hard to nurture from home.

In conclusion, even though there is less social interaction from home based work, it depends on personal preference. From other factors both abode and office setting are better for having stability in life.

Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - Essay on influence of social media on today's youth in career development. [2]

How is social media influencing the career development of today's youth, and what opportunities and challenges does it present in shaping their professional paths?

Nowadays on today's youth, social media has heavy impact on their career developments. New opportunities and obstacles are coming up because of social media and it will shape their professional paths efficiently. This essay will explain the influence of social media on today's youth and the presence of opportunities and obstacles in shaping their professional routes.

For the above question, is the first paragraph appropriate?

Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - Essay on unwinding mind with video games or outdoor activity. [2]

Compare the physical, mental and social impacts of video games and outdoor activity?Which one do you prefer as a way of unwinding?

Video games and outdoor activities are popular among people as a way to relax after a monotonous day. Both of these activities have good and bad effects on the mind, body and social life. Although I belong to Generation-Z, I prefer outdoor activity over video games for unwinding my mind.

Video games can be only played from sitting on the couch or on a chair and if breaks are not taken between playing, it can cause back pain, poor posture and obesity which is related to physical health.On the other hand, outdoor activities such as basketball, football requires stretching and light exercises that helps to move body in free movement and to circulate blood properly.

Video games can keep one's mind in good shape if they play strategic and interactive ones. Otherwise violent games can cause psychological problems. Outdoor activity such as playing with pets in a park or outside can boost up mental health and playing team based games de-stress the mind. Outdoor activities can be only done in daytime but video games can be played either daytime or nighttime.

If someone plays a video game with their peers, then they can have communal interaction in that case. Otherwise playing alone doesn't make any social interaction. In outdoor activity, you get to meet a lot of people. From the conversations , one can create social connections which is a good way to improve social skills.

In conclusion, video games and outdoor activity both have merits and demerits. But I believe that outdoor activity should be prioritised because it has a lot more benefits than video games and a good way of unwinding.

Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - Explain the benefits and shortcomings of online classes and traditional class [2]

Online classes became increasingly well known during the Covid-19 pandemic ,while traditional classes are getting less common due to restrictions. While both have advantages and disadvantages, I believe online
classes have flexibility, nevertheless traditional classes offer face-to-face interaction.

Online classes can be conducted from any place with internet availability and devices.Traditional classes have to be conducted in a certain place with specific persons and it doesn't require internet connectivity.But in the interactive traditional class you can connect students around the world.

In the online classes, one of the biggest benefits is that you can join on it from anywhere around the world even if you're sick or can't be physically present. In the traditional classes you have to be physically present otherwise you won't get the class.

Online classes also have drawbacks, one is that immense use of device which deteriorates your health. Another drawback is absence of connectivity with classmates .Traditional classes doesn't cause that kind of problem and you can connect directly with your classmates,

In conclusion, online classes and traditional classes both have benefits and shortcomings. Online classes have more benefits but traditional classes are no less than online classes in benefits.