modeerfphd
Jul 13, 2010
Graduate / SOP for Phd in Resource Economics [5]
Further, at XYZ, the presence of faculty, such as Drs. AAA, BBB and CCC, whose research interests, I feel are closely aligned with mine, would serve to bolster my own investigations while I am a student there, as well as provide me with a sense of direction for thereafter.
No comma after presence of faculty...
No comma after whose research interests...
...wouls serve to bolster my own investigations and provide me with a sense... use this instead of what you have written. It is less of a mouthful, and fully sufficient to get your point across.
Further, at XYZ, the presence of faculty, such as Drs. AAA, BBB and CCC, whose research interests, I feel are closely aligned with mine, would serve to bolster my own investigations while I am a student there, as well as provide me with a sense of direction for thereafter.
No comma after presence of faculty...
No comma after whose research interests...
...wouls serve to bolster my own investigations and provide me with a sense... use this instead of what you have written. It is less of a mouthful, and fully sufficient to get your point across.