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Brandon Zhou   
Sep 1, 2010
Writing Feedback / Now and then: the mass movement of people into the cities [11]

Question / Then and Now: The world has been transformed by the mass movement of people into the cities. Compare life before and after urbanization.

The world has been transformed by the mass movement of people to the cities. Compare life before and after urbanization. Urbanization happens both in developed countries and developing countries. Rapid urbanization brings many changes. In the developing countries, the changes are obvious. In China, there are both good changes and bad changes which lead to advantages and disadvantages. Although there are many disadvantages, urbanization brings more advantages.

There are many changes that are good because of the urbanization. For instance, in China, "Cities were far less in number than they have become today, were generally much smaller in population than now (although there were a few marked exceptions to that generalization) and were far more likely to be more deeply embedded in the present society from which they sprang."(Luca N. Wagner, 2008). Urbanization changed the life of normal people. There are an increasing number of people live in a modern life. They use more electric equipment than before such as televisions, computers as citizens. The job opportunities increased. Many people no longer work in the field just to feed their family but live in the modern city and living by working in offices, earning money by using their knowledge. Before living in cities, most of people just live as a farmer but now there are various jobs people can chose to do as long as they have enough ability. By doing jobs they are enjoyed in, people can live happier than the time people only can do boring jobs. Young people can be educated better for many schools with nice equipment to improve the quality of teaching. By having a good education, the cities and the country can develop much faster than before. Before the urbanization, student cannot get enough knowledge to bring them to higher education which leaded a slower development.

Bad changes are serious in China. The most serious problem is the destruction of the environment. As lots of people moving in to cities and lots of countryside becoming cities, more nature resources were used to provide energy for the using of cities and after the over using and wasting, few resources are left for future people. Forest is disappearing, which leads kinds of results like green house effect. Cars also can pollute. Larger population means lower level of life. Because of the number of citizens is increasing, no one wants to be farmer any longer so the lack of food is another problem. Also living in cities, people have more possibility to be unhealthy. "As regards health of urban residents, there will continue to be concerns as "Disease of Affluence" exist side-by-side with "Diseases of Poverty" (Cook and Dummer, 2004).

Some people said that because of the bad effect it is better that urbanization had not happened. But I do not think so. Comparing the good changes and bad changes, I believe that good things work more. Urbanization is certain of history. It brings many changes to our daily life. Although it does not do everything well, urbanization is nice to our human beings.

Reference:

Urbanization: 21st century issues and challenges (2008)
Luca N. Wagner books.google.com.hk/books?id=6mH__1c3ZRgC&printsec=frontcover&d q=urbanization&hl=zh-CN&ei=UyF2TPbmN46GvAODivXGBg&sa=X&oi=book_result
Brandon Zhou   
Sep 3, 2010
Writing Feedback / Now and then: the mass movement of people into the cities [11]

Thank you Kevin.
Tonight I will hand in my 2nd draft.
Your advise really gave me a great help.
My teacher told me that I didn't have enough example.
So, how can I add my examples?
Thank you.
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