KaranK
Dec 20, 2010
Undergraduate / "a place where I can grow" - Boston University, what to accomplish? [8]
Essay #1: Given what you know about Boston University, what do you hope to accomplish as an undergraduate here? Please respond in an essay of no more than 500 words.
---Please critique my essay...don't mind if its harsh..wrote in like 25min
As an undergraduate freshman, my biggest zeal is to have an unforgettable college experience. I choose Boston University as one of my dream destinations because life not only inside, but outside the university holds new experiences and challenges that will certainly captivate me. Inside the university, I can become a part of a community of people that all exhibit exceptional scholar and personality. Boston University is a place where I can grow, learn and define myself through interactions with the people and opportunities that surround me. The friends I make and the bonds that develop will last a lifetime because those are the essential sentiments and values of life that can never be forgotten. But, why stop there; outside the university is a magnificent city waiting for me to explore. The culture from the east to the west is sure to change, and I want to explore every side of it. I feel that a change in environment would best benefit me because of my personality. I am the type of person that likes to stretch my legs and arms a little here and a little there; I like to get a taste of the whole lot because it is new and exciting. I believe becoming a part of this cohesive community and atmosphere will help me to accomplish my own personal and educational goals. From wherever I stand, Boston University seems to be the whole package: a great education, a wonderful environment to grow and make friends, and overall a place where I just feel right.
Essay #1: Given what you know about Boston University, what do you hope to accomplish as an undergraduate here? Please respond in an essay of no more than 500 words.
---Please critique my essay...don't mind if its harsh..wrote in like 25min
As an undergraduate freshman, my biggest zeal is to have an unforgettable college experience. I choose Boston University as one of my dream destinations because life not only inside, but outside the university holds new experiences and challenges that will certainly captivate me. Inside the university, I can become a part of a community of people that all exhibit exceptional scholar and personality. Boston University is a place where I can grow, learn and define myself through interactions with the people and opportunities that surround me. The friends I make and the bonds that develop will last a lifetime because those are the essential sentiments and values of life that can never be forgotten. But, why stop there; outside the university is a magnificent city waiting for me to explore. The culture from the east to the west is sure to change, and I want to explore every side of it. I feel that a change in environment would best benefit me because of my personality. I am the type of person that likes to stretch my legs and arms a little here and a little there; I like to get a taste of the whole lot because it is new and exciting. I believe becoming a part of this cohesive community and atmosphere will help me to accomplish my own personal and educational goals. From wherever I stand, Boston University seems to be the whole package: a great education, a wonderful environment to grow and make friends, and overall a place where I just feel right.