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Posts by amyllei
Joined: Apr 19, 2011
Last Post: Apr 20, 2011
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amyllei   
Apr 19, 2011
Writing Feedback / About sports and international intension. Patriotic emotions? [4]

Popular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?


Even to a quite limited degree, I still cannot say I would like to agree with the argument: admittedly, international sports may help to let off people's patriotic enthusiasms, no one could make sure them safe; more important, as for international intensions, comparing with other factors resulting in such conflicts, it seems rather extremely hard for sports events to relieve them.

Sometimes, international sports events may build up or even strengthen a friendly relationship between a country and another. However, it is not always a truth. Under certain circumstances, higher patriotic emotions of fans from a country will provoke the others' anger. It is a common sense that history of football tells us that this game has been associated with violence since its very beginnings in 13 century England. That's why the phenomenon of Football Hooligans is so ordinary throughout the world. During the period of season of European Football Champion, a piece of news about that someone was hurt or killed because of football violence would not become an attracting news. Obviously, we cannot expect the international sporting occasions help some crazy fans send out their fever in a safe way.

There are uncountable complicated elements conducing to international contradictions, so it will be a dream to lay the hope of peace in sports events. Berlin Olympic of 1936 didn't prevent the

outbreak of World War II, the games was reduced to be Hitler's tool to cover up his aggressive ambition. On the one hand, if there's no any problem between two countries, the sports events may work as a friendship bridge; on the other hand, if the situation is on the contrary, any kind of sports campaign will not work.

In a word, we must give the popular events a proper role in the international relationship. We should think about their value adding to the peace but we shouldn't consider them as an effective solution to international tensions.
amyllei   
Apr 19, 2011
Writing Feedback / IELTS ; Growing traffic & pollution can be controlled by increasing petrol prices [4]

HI, sophie,

Just share you with my thinking, hope it helpful and let's improve the writing together.As for IELTS writing TASK 2,

1, We should clarify our opinion at the first paragraph direclty. From your essay, it seemed not so cleary. Do you agree or disagree at all?

2, Then we give the strong evidenct to support the opinion. For this essay, we should provide the evidence to show the way of "increasing the price" can work or cannot.

3, The following part is your suggestion. It's ok but you should polish the wording of connection of sentences.

Anything uncorrect, pls. point out. Let's do better from learning each other!

Amy
amyllei   
Apr 20, 2011
Undergraduate / "Learning From the Past" - Boston University High School Honors (Summer Term) [3]

Hi, George,

Firstly, what I want to share you is just my personal suggestion --- from my own understanding. And because I'm not native, I cannot ensure my view hasn't culture gap. Anyway, I wish I can give you some clue. And may you good luck!

I think the value of a personal statement is to show two things:
1, I'm anxious to have the chance --- why you choose BU, what makes it different or special from others for you?
2, I have the capabilities to grasp the chance and to do much better than others --- why I AM different or speical from other candidates.

So, if you make a bit revisement to let the logic of statement more clear?

By the way, dont over criticize yourself for the past mistakes --- even though the most stupid mistake will become valuable treasure on your growing path. Transform them into your wisdom rather than regret.

Ok, good luck!

Amy
amyllei   
Apr 20, 2011
Writing Feedback / IELTS: technology versus traditional skills and life [5]

When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

On the one hand, I admit that it is advanced technology that has brought a tremendous change to our life and more specifically speaking, thanks to the development of science and technology, the quality of our life has been improved significantly. On that other hand, at a certain degree, it is also the technology that pushes the traditional skills and ways of life in a danger. However, so long as we work hard, we can make both of modern and traditional well balanced.

At first, no one can stop the advancing strides of society with the aid of technology, "Technology makes life more beautiful". It is so nature that some traditional skills of low productivity will be replaced. For example, some labor intensive industries like textile had been substituted by machines. Most of processes relying on hands of workers now can be finished efficiently by enginery controlled by computers. The original weaving skills together with the old manual loom have been fading out gradually. Just for this case or likewise, it is no necessary to spend money to keep the undeveloped status.

Secondly, some of traditional skills and ways of life must be maintained as the symbol of human being's culture, such as China's traditional ceramic industry and tea industry, both of them are valuable heritages of Chinese ancestors as well as the splendid civilization achievements of humankind wisdom on the earth. We must take some actions to keep them for our future generations. They are deserved to be protected.

To sum up, technology will play its role in the society's moving on continually, meanwhile, we should give more attention to something traditional with high value for us in order to not let them fading out with time flying gradually.
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