bpatty
Jun 24, 2011
Undergraduate / Admissions for Miami International University of Art & Design [3]
Must be at least 150, i have 220.
my admissions director advised my to make it 3 paragraphs, where i speak about myself, why i want to study fashion merchandising, why i should be admitted, talents, my goals, and why i expect MIU will help attain my goals.
i need help to see if what i wrote is okay. heres what i have:
My name is Brenda Monterrey and I am a 22-year-old girl born and raised in Miami, Florida with a big heart and eye for fashion. For as long as I can remember, I have always wanted to be in the fashion industry. I believe I should be admitted because this is the field for me, I am very passionate about my interest and willing to do whatever it takes to make sure I accomplish my goals. I'm the type of person that will walk into a store and know exactly what to buy, and what pieces of clothing work and don't work; I believe that the strongest skill which comes naturally.
To me, Miami International University of Art & Design is the best school for me. It's a well know school with a good reputation and I know it will help me gain the skills I need to succeed in the fashion industry. Since I was a little girl I have dreamed of being a fashion buyer, working in fashion shows and having the chance to be someone's stylist and I know it can happen.
I believe that Miami International University of Art & Design will provide me with the tools and skills I need to succeed in in this field, and help make my goals and dreams come true.
Must be at least 150, i have 220.
my admissions director advised my to make it 3 paragraphs, where i speak about myself, why i want to study fashion merchandising, why i should be admitted, talents, my goals, and why i expect MIU will help attain my goals.
i need help to see if what i wrote is okay. heres what i have:
My name is Brenda Monterrey and I am a 22-year-old girl born and raised in Miami, Florida with a big heart and eye for fashion. For as long as I can remember, I have always wanted to be in the fashion industry. I believe I should be admitted because this is the field for me, I am very passionate about my interest and willing to do whatever it takes to make sure I accomplish my goals. I'm the type of person that will walk into a store and know exactly what to buy, and what pieces of clothing work and don't work; I believe that the strongest skill which comes naturally.
To me, Miami International University of Art & Design is the best school for me. It's a well know school with a good reputation and I know it will help me gain the skills I need to succeed in the fashion industry. Since I was a little girl I have dreamed of being a fashion buyer, working in fashion shows and having the chance to be someone's stylist and I know it can happen.
I believe that Miami International University of Art & Design will provide me with the tools and skills I need to succeed in in this field, and help make my goals and dreams come true.
