Writing Feedback / Toefl - Television & Movies have a huge impact on our social behavior. [5]

hi Sab..
there are few things, in my opinion u should re-consider.
1).There has appeared endless debates on who television change the behavior and habits of our society-There has been endless debate on how television and movies affect the behavior and habits of viewers.

2) and think that pills are ok (good) for your health.
on many places u have lost the way of simple grammar. the ideas are good but lack of word and vocabulary can be clearly seen.

i liked the word "tube" most.
i wold say 6/10.
u could have done much better.
i am hoping to see a better one from u.
TC

Writing Feedback / Toefl - Television & Movies have a huge impact on our social behavior. [5]

hey there..
i appreciate that u r ready to learn because the first step is most difficult. even im trying to learn vocab. the news papers, journals, BBC channel,

movies does help a lot. even music helps. look for words used in lyrics. read books. these things help a lot. at least for me they have. try them.

best of luck.
TC