Undergraduate / 'Rejection has become a close friend' - Personal talent, quality Prompt #2 [4]

I like how you first started telling people about your rejection and about how that made you who you are. I also liked how you related dance to every part of your life. But I feel like in some instances, the rejection part keeps overlapping your successes. I mean, yes this essay does show your determination (with the dance classes and part time job), but I felt like when you mentioned the "growing experience" it was too late in the essay.

I do like how it is concise, but there could be a lot more examples. At least, in my opinion. But good luck :)