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cheeku   
Nov 28, 2008
Undergraduate / What tutoring means to me - Common App Short Answer [10]

In the space provided below, please elaborate on one of your activities (extracurricular, personal activities, or work experience)(150 words or fewer).

The sixth grade child absorbs every word as I explain to him the difference between an independent and dependent clause. Fifteen minutes later, he flashes his completed worksheet at me and exclaims his epiphany to everyone in sight--until a stern librarian shushes him.

His uncontrollable excitement motivates me to establish a tutoring session every Saturday and Sunday for inner-city students. Initially, tutoring presented me with various challenges such as searching for the clearest method of teaching, expressing myself completely, and learning how to instruct with patience and compassion. However, after several weeks of using each lesson plan with my little brother, I began to comprehend the intricate learning process undergone by each of the students I tutor. My experiences also broadened my understanding of the complex human mind.

Thus, tutoring enables me to appreciate the individuality of every person and develop my perception of the inner needs of others. Educating others also inspires me to continue my career path in a subject area that requires interacting with my environment.

Nice job. Add a sentence to the end... a sentence that wraps up the whole truth of the essay.
cheeku   
Nov 30, 2008
Undergraduate / Which Professor offers faculty and research opportunities? Essay... [6]

Hi!
I think your essay is a good start. The imagery is well done. However, you should elaborate more upon Professor O'Leary, otherwise you could have simply inserted any professor's name in that essay (make it more personal and show that you took the time researching about the professor).

Also, when you say you have the passion and commitment, show that you do, don't simply state. Give examples.
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