ShaPrea Patters
Jan 17, 2012
Writing Feedback / The Life Of Living Rich and Poor [2]
This is my introducing to my essay. I need help on it, how does it sound?
Looking around neighborhoods, seeing big nice houses, and shabby houses and neighborhoods, thinking if it's the rich or the poor. We all know the differents. The big nice houses are the rich, and the shabby houses are the poor. Life itself is to make sure your family have stability. Having food, shelter, lights, clothing, transportation, money, medical, and everything that keeps your house and family going. Each and every last one of us have one thing in commom, and that is making sure that we have stability. It does not matter how much much money is in your pocket or bank. The only thing that matters is that everyone can take care of the keepings of shelter, food, transportation, medical, and other important necessities that comes with living life. Lets look in the life of living rich and poor. When it comes to money, a comfortable lifestyle, and fulfilling family orientation, the rich can live comfortable, while the poor do not.
This is my introducing to my essay. I need help on it, how does it sound?
Looking around neighborhoods, seeing big nice houses, and shabby houses and neighborhoods, thinking if it's the rich or the poor. We all know the differents. The big nice houses are the rich, and the shabby houses are the poor. Life itself is to make sure your family have stability. Having food, shelter, lights, clothing, transportation, money, medical, and everything that keeps your house and family going. Each and every last one of us have one thing in commom, and that is making sure that we have stability. It does not matter how much much money is in your pocket or bank. The only thing that matters is that everyone can take care of the keepings of shelter, food, transportation, medical, and other important necessities that comes with living life. Lets look in the life of living rich and poor. When it comes to money, a comfortable lifestyle, and fulfilling family orientation, the rich can live comfortable, while the poor do not.