Undergraduate / 'snippets of Urdu' ONE paragraph grammatically [5]

Wow. That first para edit would have been really good. Sigh. But I have already submitted this as it is.

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Undergraduate / 'snippets of Urdu' ONE paragraph grammatically [5]

Any more reviews?

Undergraduate / 'snippets of Urdu' ONE paragraph grammatically [5]

I get what you said about describing things with more intensity, and I agree that I should have done that more.

Well, the past about me being an outcast...in that case, what I had tried to say was that I felt that I was an outcast, not that I actually was. I felt that I was not part of whatever there was around me, and I was wrong, because even after trying my best, I ended up realizing that I was a part of my community after all, and how it shaped my views and ideas. Guess, it didn't turn out well..

Thanks for the review though.