Posts by geovlas

geovlas

Aug 19, 2012

Letters / 'interest in the Data entry clerk' cover letter for an entry level position help [5]

I believe the following:
'...both orally and in writing, I am diligent and able to multitask in a busy environment and exceed deadlines; hence I am confident that I am the perfect candidate for the job.'

would be better if put like this:
'...both in oral and in written but I am also able to multitask in a busy environment in a diligent way while managing deadlines. I am therefore confident that I would be a perfect candidate for this job.'

I think it is a bit more clear.

geovlas

Aug 19, 2012

Letters / I have completed my studies granted 'excellence' - Cover Letter to enter UN [NEW]

Could you please revise this letter and comment on it; I feel it is a bit long and weak.

'Dear Hiring Manager for YPP,

I am addressing you to apply for the Young Professionals Program Examination Procedure at the field of Architecture. As a young graduate Architect, I am confident that I fit the profile of a P2-level Associative Architect, as described in your official United Nations site.

Having recently completed a five-year curriculum I obtained an equivalent of a Master's degree in Architectural Engineering from the Aristotle University of Thessaloniki's School of Architecture. I have completed my studies granted 'excellence' with a grade of 9,07/10 ranking in the top three of my semester.

During my diploma design thesis, I have had the opportunity to develop a prototype building typology for a new type of library and algorithms that dealt with the area of 'content management' of digital collections. Furthermore, my participation in a plethora of intensive, off-curriculum workshops has deepened both my collaborative skills as well as my ability to achieve goals in limited timeframes.

Contemporaneously to my studies, I have been gaining practical experience in the field. Through this experience, I received profound knowledge on understanding and delivering technical drawings and documenting projects. Among others, it offered me valuable experience in the construction industry and building codes. From all the above experiences, I came to find that my major strength is the ability to deliver positive results under any given circumstance.

I consider the actions of the United Nations Organization to be profoundly influential globe wide and therefore being part of this organization appeals greatly to me. A job with you is a great step towards a globally active career.

Thank you for your time and consideration.'

It should be really great, as to pop out from the mass; the competition is really hard!

Thank you everybody

geovlas

Aug 19, 2012

Essays / Should I mention my health issue in my SOP? [12]

Hello from me too,

I believe you should include it in short as to justify your studies timeline. I think it could be a positive factor in your letter if you just focused on the good things the whole thing added to your personality. I d suggest that you shouldn t mention that you are fine so far, since it would attract attention to the difficulties it cause in a future case where you wont be fine. So, keep it reference-free from any link to the past, make it sound like a health adventure that gave you great things as a personality.