Aengj
Sep 9, 2012
Undergraduate / Application Essay for a College Entrepreneurship Program [2]
I love the quote you used to start your essay but I'm not 100% certain how that relates to independence. I see where it's coming from but I think a sentence in your intro to connect it with your quote would help. I think you use the motif of jailer in your essay.
"Conformity is the jailer of freedom and the enemy of growth."(John F. Kennedy) Over the years I've learned to unlock my own unique independence...
I am by no means a half decent write
I love the quote you used to start your essay but I'm not 100% certain how that relates to independence. I see where it's coming from but I think a sentence in your intro to connect it with your quote would help. I think you use the motif of jailer in your essay.
"Conformity is the jailer of freedom and the enemy of growth."(John F. Kennedy) Over the years I've learned to unlock my own unique independence...
I am by no means a half decent write