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"Is the purpose of education to change the world?"

Education can benefit the mankind in tremendous ways and hence it does have the power to change the world. Education is essential for human beings so that we can survive this incredibly complex and labyrinthine world we live in. Without education we would suddenly be shoved back to primeval times and drown in poverty. The purpose of Jaago Foundation and the story of Laila from the book A Thousand Splendid Suns really show what difference education can make in one's life.

Jaago Foundation is a non-profit organization which provides free of cost education to the destitute and underprivileged children of Bangladesh. The school consists of the offspring of people who are beggars, maids, rickshaw-pullers, homeless or are earning a very low income. These children, had they not been receiving education, would have ended up just like their parents. Not an enticing prospect but they wouldn't have had any other options. Now thanks to education and Jaago's initiative, these children have a much brighter future with hopefully better job opportunities than their parents.

Moreover, in the book A Thousand Splendid Suns, the character Laila also shows how education can aid a person in life when nothing else can. Laila is a girl from Afghanistan growing up in a war-riddled and politically unstable country. Despite the economic turmoil around them her father always encouraged and reinforced the need for education. When Laila grows up and finds herself on the verge of poverty with her husband jobless and her children starving, she sets out to look for a job herself. She eventually finds a position as a teacher in the orphanage and saves her family from a terrible fate. If she hadn't had faithful education by her side in times of need, she would be left helpless and incompetent.

There is no denying that education can dramatically affect our lives and help us prosper and succeed. It improves our standard of living so we can lead more comfortable lives. It saves us from the clutches of ignorance and it helps us be much wiser in our decisions. Nelson Mandela summed it up beautifully when he said "Education is the tool with which we can change the world."

Can someone grade this essay for me please? Out of six?