stormynick
Apr 12, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS-writing a short essay to express why moves to a new house and how's that place. [2]
Dear John,
When you read this letter, I have already moved to College Square, somewhere in the several-minute walking distance to University of Melbourne.
I had a pleasant time when I lived in South Yarra. I missed everything there, especially the joyful moments we shared together. But I have to move to the current apartment because of two reasons.
The distance between the old place to my university and the commuting fee are the main reasons of my movement. Every day, I spend almost two hours commuting to my university and back home. I have intensive daily study load, 4 hours for lectures and workshops, 2 for review and homework. I also need to fight for cooking, daily laundry and everything necessary to keep me a healthy and decent man. Two hours on the road is a definite luxury to me.
Furthermore, Melbourne's transportation fee is extremely expensive. Spending seven dollars everyday is quite a financial burden for me. Now I move to my current place, just as I mentioned before, a place in the walking distance. I can save 35 dollars every week.
Now let me talk something about my new apartment. It is a small apartment with two bedrooms, one dining room, a bathroom and an open kitchen. What delights me is the balcony which provides a panorama view of the Melbourne CBD. We live on 30th floor. It is really beautiful when the night falls and lights are on everywhere. Along with the smell of light and fresh breeze coming from the ocean, I couldn't help but image how bright my future would be in this magnificent city.
You must come and visit my lovely apartment when you are free. I will take you to this amazing balcony. Let's have some champagne and talk just like the old times. I couldn't wait any longer. How about this weekend? Give me a call so we can talk more about my place.
Yours sincerely
Bruce
Dear John,
When you read this letter, I have already moved to College Square, somewhere in the several-minute walking distance to University of Melbourne.
I had a pleasant time when I lived in South Yarra. I missed everything there, especially the joyful moments we shared together. But I have to move to the current apartment because of two reasons.
The distance between the old place to my university and the commuting fee are the main reasons of my movement. Every day, I spend almost two hours commuting to my university and back home. I have intensive daily study load, 4 hours for lectures and workshops, 2 for review and homework. I also need to fight for cooking, daily laundry and everything necessary to keep me a healthy and decent man. Two hours on the road is a definite luxury to me.
Furthermore, Melbourne's transportation fee is extremely expensive. Spending seven dollars everyday is quite a financial burden for me. Now I move to my current place, just as I mentioned before, a place in the walking distance. I can save 35 dollars every week.
Now let me talk something about my new apartment. It is a small apartment with two bedrooms, one dining room, a bathroom and an open kitchen. What delights me is the balcony which provides a panorama view of the Melbourne CBD. We live on 30th floor. It is really beautiful when the night falls and lights are on everywhere. Along with the smell of light and fresh breeze coming from the ocean, I couldn't help but image how bright my future would be in this magnificent city.
You must come and visit my lovely apartment when you are free. I will take you to this amazing balcony. Let's have some champagne and talk just like the old times. I couldn't wait any longer. How about this weekend? Give me a call so we can talk more about my place.
Yours sincerely
Bruce