Posts by Hamoudi95

Hamoudi95

Jul 9, 2013

Undergraduate / The canadian embassy wants me to me to submit my future about canada. Any ideas? [17]

Hello
Please i need urgent help. I have applied for a study visa in Canada and now i am just a few steps away from getting it. The embassy replied back and said that i must do my medical, which i did, but here is where i need help. They included in the letter that i must include details concerning the length of my program and the study plan for the long term. this is where i need help. I have written a sample i need your HELP to correct or see errors. if you need more information about the school please tell me. And please i have less than a week to submit.

Below is the sample i wrote:

Dear Sir/Madame,
My name is Mohammed Khanafer and I am 17 years old and I intend to continue my education in Canada in Aviron Technical Institute. This letter I am writing is to indicate the duration of my studies in Canada and my study plan for the long term.

In the case of duration of studies, my program of study will start form 20 August 2013 and end at 30 October 2014, which is approximately 1 year and 2 months, with each course lasting 6 hours per day.

I intend to study Industrial Design in Canada during that 1 year and 2 months, and then come back to my home country, which is The Gambia, and use all the education I got in Aviron Technical Institute to help make my country. And since Gambia is at its early developing stages and soon enough, will start making its own products, the knowledge I gained will help the country in perfecting the products to its maximum so that people can buy it without complaints or problems.

Hamoudi95

Jul 9, 2013

Undergraduate / Community service at the Morant Bay Infirmary; Extracurricular activity [4]

supreeth97
Am not whether you understand what you wrote. You said you want atleast 1000 character but if you count the word you wrote you get 231 characters? Its either i am wrong or i you dont understand what you wrote

Hamoudi95

Jul 10, 2013

Undergraduate / The canadian embassy wants me to me to submit my future about canada. Any ideas? [17]

Hello
So the one i wrote is okay? Or should i add some more information? If so could you please tell me what exactly?

Hamoudi95

Jul 10, 2013

Undergraduate / The canadian embassy wants me to me to submit my future about canada. Any ideas? [17]

I also forgot to add that in Gambia we dont have any goods that we produce. what i mean that here they do not produce hard goods like fans washing machines cars e.t.c they only produce food and liquid stuff. should i emphasize more on this or what?

Hamoudi95

Jul 10, 2013

Undergraduate / The canadian embassy wants me to me to submit my future about canada. Any ideas? [17]

Thank you very much Dumi,

Now i need just one more problem to solve. I need a strong opinion on to why i want to come back to gambia

Hamoudi95

Jul 10, 2013

Undergraduate / The canadian embassy wants me to me to submit my future about canada. Any ideas? [17]

jkjeremy
Okay so far so good.
Now this is part of the re-corrected paragraph. What do you think about it. I appreciate any correction and/or ideas.

"I hope to major in Industrial Design at the Aviron Technical Institute in Canada and upon completion of the course I would return to my home country, Gambia in hope of making my contribution to my country by utilizing the newly acquired knowledge. And since Gambia is at its early developing stage, and soon, will start making its own products, the knowledge I gained will help the country in perfecting the products to its maximum so that people can buy it without complaints or problems. Industrial design is the service of creating and developing of products that optimize the function, appearance and value and systems both mutual benefit, for the manufacturer and the producer."

is the conclusion good or does not match?

Hamoudi95

Jul 10, 2013

Undergraduate / The canadian embassy wants me to me to submit my future about canada. Any ideas? [17]

Should i add more or its okay? Besides is it convincing enough?

Hamoudi95

Jul 10, 2013

Undergraduate / The canadian embassy wants me to me to submit my future about canada. Any ideas? [17]

okay no problem this is it

This is in reference to your application for a Canadian study permit.. In order for us to continue the processing of your application, we require the following documents:

-Details concerning the length of your program

-Your study plan for the long term

Please note:

All documents must be accompanied by English or French translations. When original documents are requested, notarised documents are not acceptable.

The above information/documents must be received in our office within 30 days from the date of this letter.Failure to do so could result in the refusal of your application. Please quote your complete application number on your correspondence and address your correspondence to the Canadian Embassy of Senegal in Dakar at the address indicated below.

Thank you for the interest you have shown in Canada.

Hamoudi95

Jul 10, 2013

Undergraduate / The canadian embassy wants me to me to submit my future about canada. Any ideas? [17]

Where does it say that this is required?

Also, when is this due?

It is not on the paper. The applicant must convince them that he/she is coming back to their home country once they finish there study programs.

This is due in 5 days time, with today almost done i have 4 days left.

Hamoudi95

Jul 10, 2013

Undergraduate / The canadian embassy wants me to me to submit my future about canada. Any ideas? [17]

Okay no problem its 9:01 pm here so you can message anytime cause i will be awake all night working on it.

I have a couple students to deal with first.

from what you said up there! are you a teacher?

And thanks very much for the help