Kate64
Nov 23, 2013
Writing Feedback / Lots of people choose to have a pet as a companion in their lives [6]
Toefl Essay: Pets should be treated like family members. Do you agree or disagree?
Pets have been great friends for humans for thousands of years. Lots of people choose to have a pet as a companion in their lives. The way we behave towards our pets reflects our personality and character. I believe that we have to treat our pets like a family member regardless of our financial situation and our living condition. We don't want our pets to suffer so we have to love them unconditionally because we are the ones that choose to keep them in captivity and take advantage of their company.
In my opinion most animals are very sensitive emotionally. Some are proved to be as smart as young children like African grey parrots. I had a friend who owned one and had to leave the parrot alone for several hours at home every day. He then noticed that the parrot developed a kind of misbehavior and plucked his feathers as a result of being stressed for his loneliness. A behavior which the owner later noticed that is very hard to reverse. If we do not treat them just like one of our family members they will suffer just as a young child might does.
Most pets love their owners, and when they receive love in return they understand it and they show appreciation. They want to stay with their owners always and emotionally they stay healthy, and this is how we, as pet owners, want them to be.
Moreover I think our behavior reflects our character. It shows our personality. If we treat a pet like a family member we show other people in our house hold including our children how to behave. We need to teach this to our kids to love the animal, especially those who we keep in our captivity. We need to behave in a way we expect our children do towards pets.
In recent years communication between people have been reduced due to many reasons including busier lifestyles. Therefor more people choose to have a pet to fill this gap. We need to treat our pets like one of our family members, and then we will have real good friends and will enjoy living with them.
PS: This does not reflect my personal opinion about this topic. I am anti-pets. I believe all animals should live free in their natural environments. But there we have to write an essay. And we are not given enough options to choose from. :D
PSS: I tried to use only my 30 minutes. This writing could have probably been improved by a second revision.
I'd like to thank you for reading this. Your feedback is greatly appreciated.
Kate.
Toefl Essay: Pets should be treated like family members. Do you agree or disagree?
Pets have been great friends for humans for thousands of years. Lots of people choose to have a pet as a companion in their lives. The way we behave towards our pets reflects our personality and character. I believe that we have to treat our pets like a family member regardless of our financial situation and our living condition. We don't want our pets to suffer so we have to love them unconditionally because we are the ones that choose to keep them in captivity and take advantage of their company.
In my opinion most animals are very sensitive emotionally. Some are proved to be as smart as young children like African grey parrots. I had a friend who owned one and had to leave the parrot alone for several hours at home every day. He then noticed that the parrot developed a kind of misbehavior and plucked his feathers as a result of being stressed for his loneliness. A behavior which the owner later noticed that is very hard to reverse. If we do not treat them just like one of our family members they will suffer just as a young child might does.
Most pets love their owners, and when they receive love in return they understand it and they show appreciation. They want to stay with their owners always and emotionally they stay healthy, and this is how we, as pet owners, want them to be.
Moreover I think our behavior reflects our character. It shows our personality. If we treat a pet like a family member we show other people in our house hold including our children how to behave. We need to teach this to our kids to love the animal, especially those who we keep in our captivity. We need to behave in a way we expect our children do towards pets.
In recent years communication between people have been reduced due to many reasons including busier lifestyles. Therefor more people choose to have a pet to fill this gap. We need to treat our pets like one of our family members, and then we will have real good friends and will enjoy living with them.
PS: This does not reflect my personal opinion about this topic. I am anti-pets. I believe all animals should live free in their natural environments. But there we have to write an essay. And we are not given enough options to choose from. :D
PSS: I tried to use only my 30 minutes. This writing could have probably been improved by a second revision.
I'd like to thank you for reading this. Your feedback is greatly appreciated.
Kate.