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Mar 17, 2014
Undergraduate / If you were a superhero, what would your super power be....? PSEO entrance essay [3]
Hi,
Here is the prompt I wrote about:
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If you were a superhero, what would your super power be, why, and for what purposes would you use it?
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The essay needs to be around 500 words in length and the writing needs to be at college level. All spelling, punctuation and grammar matter. I would really appreciate it if you guys could take a look and see what needs improving or could be re-said in a different way. Anything will help. Thanks!
Essay:
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If I were a superhero, my power would be the ability to control time. With my power, I would be able to stop, reverse, slow down and speed up time whenever I pleased. People often ask, "If you could go back in time and change one thing, what would it be?" With my power, I would actually be able to do such a thing. Having control of time would give me control of any situation, whether it involves me or not.
One of the first ways I would utilize my superpower would be to make my life easier. If I didn't feel like waking up, I could just stop time and sleep in for a while. If I trip and start to fall, all I would have to do is slow down time and recover. Another way I would use for superpower would be to help me think through tough situations. Often, I am forced to make a split second decision that could negatively impact myself or others. Having the power to stop time would give me the ability to ponder the possible outcomes of my decision and allow me to chose the best option. Being able to control time would truly be an ultimate power to have.
While I would personally enjoy the benefits of my superpower, I would also use it to help others. Many uncomfortable and even deadly situations could be avoided with my ability to control time. For example, a car runs a red light and there is another car about to crash right into it. With my ability to slow down, stop and reverse time, I would be able to effortlessly forestall the accident from happening and prevent serious injuries. [don't know what else to add]
Although having the ability to control time would be a nice superpower to have, it would come with its share of drawbacks. Because I would be the only person to have access to this power, everyone would want me to help them; the demand would be overwhelming, to say the least. I would no longer have a normal life. Instead, my life would consist of constant requests for me to demonstrate my abilities. In order for me to have a superpower, I would need to sacrifice having a normal life, which to me, would be worth it.
Therefore, having the the ability to control time would be an amazing superpower to have. There would be many different opportunities to help myself and others. But, there would also be added responsibilities that I would have to deal with. For that reason, having a superpower is not always as great as it seems, but despite the drawbacks, it would be well worth it.
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I was not sure what format to put it in so I went with the 5 paragraph essay.
Here are the main things that need to be at college level:
-Spelling, punctuation, grammar
-Organization
-Clear/Easy to understand
Is this college level?
Thanks for reading
Hi,
Here is the prompt I wrote about:
--
If you were a superhero, what would your super power be, why, and for what purposes would you use it?
--
The essay needs to be around 500 words in length and the writing needs to be at college level. All spelling, punctuation and grammar matter. I would really appreciate it if you guys could take a look and see what needs improving or could be re-said in a different way. Anything will help. Thanks!
Essay:
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If I were a superhero, my power would be the ability to control time. With my power, I would be able to stop, reverse, slow down and speed up time whenever I pleased. People often ask, "If you could go back in time and change one thing, what would it be?" With my power, I would actually be able to do such a thing. Having control of time would give me control of any situation, whether it involves me or not.
One of the first ways I would utilize my superpower would be to make my life easier. If I didn't feel like waking up, I could just stop time and sleep in for a while. If I trip and start to fall, all I would have to do is slow down time and recover. Another way I would use for superpower would be to help me think through tough situations. Often, I am forced to make a split second decision that could negatively impact myself or others. Having the power to stop time would give me the ability to ponder the possible outcomes of my decision and allow me to chose the best option. Being able to control time would truly be an ultimate power to have.
While I would personally enjoy the benefits of my superpower, I would also use it to help others. Many uncomfortable and even deadly situations could be avoided with my ability to control time. For example, a car runs a red light and there is another car about to crash right into it. With my ability to slow down, stop and reverse time, I would be able to effortlessly forestall the accident from happening and prevent serious injuries. [don't know what else to add]
Although having the ability to control time would be a nice superpower to have, it would come with its share of drawbacks. Because I would be the only person to have access to this power, everyone would want me to help them; the demand would be overwhelming, to say the least. I would no longer have a normal life. Instead, my life would consist of constant requests for me to demonstrate my abilities. In order for me to have a superpower, I would need to sacrifice having a normal life, which to me, would be worth it.
Therefore, having the the ability to control time would be an amazing superpower to have. There would be many different opportunities to help myself and others. But, there would also be added responsibilities that I would have to deal with. For that reason, having a superpower is not always as great as it seems, but despite the drawbacks, it would be well worth it.
--
I was not sure what format to put it in so I went with the 5 paragraph essay.
Here are the main things that need to be at college level:
-Spelling, punctuation, grammar
-Organization
-Clear/Easy to understand
Is this college level?
Thanks for reading