Akatsuki
Jun 14, 2014
Writing Feedback / 'human beings are far from perfect' - Essay about an ideal wife [3]
This is my essay about an ideal wife. I see that there is too mush usage of 'she should' or 'she would' and also that strong vocabulary has not been used in right places. There might also be mistakes. I would like some feedback to improve my essay.
Getting married is an important part in everybody's life and it is not an easy life. Every man or woman would want his/her partner to be special or even perfect for them. But human beings are far from perfect and it is to each individual to define what his ideal husband or wife should be.
In my case, I would want someone whom I can really depend on. I would wake up by her tender kiss and we would prepare breakfast together. Her beaming face would give me hope and courage and I would be the same for her too. In the evening I would like to have dinner with her and fall asleep holding her in my arms.
The image of my ideal wife would of course be of a gorgeous woman's. I seriously doubt that one would want one's wife to be ugly. She should be cute and pretty, have a good sense of style and fashion and most important of all: a nice smile. I would also prefer to be taller than her so as when we stand beside each other, we would not stand out by being odd.
She ought to have a good personality as well. She would be cheerful and always smiling. She would be kind and caring for others. She is to be independent but not mind me helping her. She must not be selfish, arrogant, indifferent, impolite, hypocrite or dumb. I want her to have smartness and beauty combined. She should not be taciturn and must have a good sense of humor. She must not be shy, but rather have a strong will and personality, so that she can stand up for her own.
She needs to have her own talents. A basic one is cooking. She would be a good cook and I would prefer that she does the cooking at home. She also needs to have a good parenthood ability. She should be gentle, understanding and caring to our future children. I believe that a mother plays a more important role in bringing up a child than a man does and, so, she must do her best in fulfilling these tasks as a parent.
My wife would have a good family background for obvious reasons. She would also have a good job which earns a fair amount of money. If we have the resources, I would rather hire a maid to do the household chores than having her doing it. She must also be loyal and faithful to me, and someone whom I can trust completely. The money we would earn would be put together and would mostly be used for the education of our children and the amenities of life.
This generally sums up all that I expect my ideal spouse to be or the qualities that I wish her to have. But even while she has all these qualities, it is only when we would truly understand each other then she is my perfect soul mate.
This is my essay about an ideal wife. I see that there is too mush usage of 'she should' or 'she would' and also that strong vocabulary has not been used in right places. There might also be mistakes. I would like some feedback to improve my essay.
Getting married is an important part in everybody's life and it is not an easy life. Every man or woman would want his/her partner to be special or even perfect for them. But human beings are far from perfect and it is to each individual to define what his ideal husband or wife should be.
In my case, I would want someone whom I can really depend on. I would wake up by her tender kiss and we would prepare breakfast together. Her beaming face would give me hope and courage and I would be the same for her too. In the evening I would like to have dinner with her and fall asleep holding her in my arms.
The image of my ideal wife would of course be of a gorgeous woman's. I seriously doubt that one would want one's wife to be ugly. She should be cute and pretty, have a good sense of style and fashion and most important of all: a nice smile. I would also prefer to be taller than her so as when we stand beside each other, we would not stand out by being odd.
She ought to have a good personality as well. She would be cheerful and always smiling. She would be kind and caring for others. She is to be independent but not mind me helping her. She must not be selfish, arrogant, indifferent, impolite, hypocrite or dumb. I want her to have smartness and beauty combined. She should not be taciturn and must have a good sense of humor. She must not be shy, but rather have a strong will and personality, so that she can stand up for her own.
She needs to have her own talents. A basic one is cooking. She would be a good cook and I would prefer that she does the cooking at home. She also needs to have a good parenthood ability. She should be gentle, understanding and caring to our future children. I believe that a mother plays a more important role in bringing up a child than a man does and, so, she must do her best in fulfilling these tasks as a parent.
My wife would have a good family background for obvious reasons. She would also have a good job which earns a fair amount of money. If we have the resources, I would rather hire a maid to do the household chores than having her doing it. She must also be loyal and faithful to me, and someone whom I can trust completely. The money we would earn would be put together and would mostly be used for the education of our children and the amenities of life.
This generally sums up all that I expect my ideal spouse to be or the qualities that I wish her to have. But even while she has all these qualities, it is only when we would truly understand each other then she is my perfect soul mate.