sortiz15
Jan 13, 2015
Undergraduate / "Don't Forget The Lyrics" (A Cheesy Common App Essay About A Bad Audition - Prompt #2) [5]
Hello everyone! This is my first rough draft for my common app essay that I will be submitting to colleges. It's a little short (just for now) so I thought I jump on the bandwagon and hear your thoughts and feedback on my essay and what I should ADD, CHANGE, EDIT, LEAVE, KEEP, etc. in order to improve it. (Just give it to me! Lol) I'm hoping to pursue a career in the performing & visual arts and crossing my fingers in hopes of getting into my top choice, Emerson College in Boston, MA. There is a 650 word limit. Thanks again! :)
PROMPT: Recount an incident or time when you experienced failure. How did it affect you, and what lessons did you learn?
Standing before a panel of judges, I took a deep breath and smiled nervously.
"You got this," I told myself, trying to ignore the clenching pain in my stomach. No matter how many times I had played this moment out in my head, nothing had prepared me for what was about to happen next. I took a quick glimpse at my mother, who anxiously watched from the front row. The karaoke rendition of Stevie Wonder's For Once In My Life began to play and almost in an instant - I couldn't think of the first verse.
Although I've had a fair amount of terrible audition experiences, I believed that what I had went through that day took the cake. Usually, I pretended to be confident when it came to auditions.This, however, was not the case.I was notified about the audition just a day before and didn't want to refuse the opportunity. With little knowledge of what I had signed up for, I decided to give the gig a shot. No questions asked. But it wasn't until I arrived at the audition the next day that I learned it was actually an audition for The Voice.
"The Voice?" I asked hesitantly.
"Yes ma'm," answered the receptionist as she wrote down my name on the paper attached to her clipboard.
I was mortified. It was too late to turn back now. I felt like changing my name and fleeing the country.
Hello everyone! This is my first rough draft for my common app essay that I will be submitting to colleges. It's a little short (just for now) so I thought I jump on the bandwagon and hear your thoughts and feedback on my essay and what I should ADD, CHANGE, EDIT, LEAVE, KEEP, etc. in order to improve it. (Just give it to me! Lol) I'm hoping to pursue a career in the performing & visual arts and crossing my fingers in hopes of getting into my top choice, Emerson College in Boston, MA. There is a 650 word limit. Thanks again! :)
PROMPT: Recount an incident or time when you experienced failure. How did it affect you, and what lessons did you learn?
Standing before a panel of judges, I took a deep breath and smiled nervously.
"You got this," I told myself, trying to ignore the clenching pain in my stomach. No matter how many times I had played this moment out in my head, nothing had prepared me for what was about to happen next. I took a quick glimpse at my mother, who anxiously watched from the front row. The karaoke rendition of Stevie Wonder's For Once In My Life began to play and almost in an instant - I couldn't think of the first verse.
Although I've had a fair amount of terrible audition experiences, I believed that what I had went through that day took the cake. Usually, I pretended to be confident when it came to auditions.This, however, was not the case.I was notified about the audition just a day before and didn't want to refuse the opportunity. With little knowledge of what I had signed up for, I decided to give the gig a shot. No questions asked. But it wasn't until I arrived at the audition the next day that I learned it was actually an audition for The Voice.
"The Voice?" I asked hesitantly.
"Yes ma'm," answered the receptionist as she wrote down my name on the paper attached to her clipboard.
I was mortified. It was too late to turn back now. I felt like changing my name and fleeing the country.
