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Name: Tan Xin Zhi
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alphonse95   
Jan 20, 2015
Undergraduate / 3 minutes glory on stage, 10 years of hard work off the stage - essay about educational gap. [5]

Hello, I'm applying University of Minnesota and got this essay prompt
'If there have been any breaks in your education after completing high school or between any years of college or university enrollment, tell us what you did during those breaks'

need some help, English is not my native language><

After I graduated from my high school, I was planning to work in the Malaysia's only legal casino, Casino de Genting. This casino is part of the Resort World Genting, located in the most awe-inspiring and spectacular mountain in the state of Pahang, Gunung Ulu Kali. I went for the interview and I passed it, but I refuse to accept the job.

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alphonse95   
Jan 20, 2015
Undergraduate / 3 minutes glory on stage, 10 years of hard work off the stage - essay about educational gap. [5]

Passion. What is passion? Passion is a strong feeling of lust. Everyone has their own passion towards different things. My passion is MAGIC. Why? Why do I choose magic? This is because magic doesn't just entertain the performer himself but also entertain his audiences; it's like killing two birds with one stone. Magic is an art of illusion, making your audiences to believe what you're performing on stage is real. I love to see the curious and "how did he do that?" on the audiences' faces.

Back then when I was around 5, I used to visit my granduncle's house every weekend for family reunion. One day, one of my elder cousin showed me a card trick-Ambitious Card (a classic magic effect which a playing card seems to return to the top of the deck after placed elsewhere in the middle of the deck) and I became curious and I gained the urge to learn magic, so from that day I started to have a little interest towards magic. I started to learn magic for fun and I had learned a bunch of cheap tricks to fool my classmates in elementary school. At the day that I saw the epic act "Walking through the Great Wall of China" from David Copperfield, my jaw dropped! That was the day that I gained my true passion towards magic.

After I graduated from my high school, I was planning to work in the Malaysia's only legal casino, Casino de Genting. I went for the interview and I passed it, but I refuse to accept the job. I would prefer to find a job related to magic as it had been my interest since young.

One day after I passed the interview of the casino, my friend asks if I would like to work in his uncle's shop-The Magic Club. It was a great opportunity for me to pursue my passion, I accept her offer immediately and I called the casino's human department to cancel my post. The day I left home for my job, it was an unforgettable experience for me as I was one step nearer to my dream. My life is much more fun and unique after I start to work in the magic shop.

I was shocked at first after knowing that the workers in the shop were aged 25 and above. This is because magic is mostly play by teens for me. After working there for few months, eventually everything turns out fine, I am so thankful that I could communicate well with my colleagues as I thought I wouldn't. In fact, we always exchange our opinion with each other. While we were exchanging ideas, I had learnt new stuffs from them which really enrich my knowledge about magic.

I also learned a lot of thing from them apart from magic, there was a conflict between the manager and the supplier, and we found out that the quotation that he gave us was far more expensive than the other supplier from china. So we decided to order our goods from China, after we ordered our first batch of goods we found out that the total cost had not much different compared to the quotation that the previous supplier gave us. Although the price of the goods itself is cheaper, but the phone bill, transportation, taxes, and etc., we named it 'the invisible cost' cost us more than it should be if we ordered it from our previous supplier. After this incident, I've learned that we should see things deeper, think from different perspective before we do it.

As the Chinese saying goes, 3 minutes glory on stage, 10 years of hard work off the stage. I remember that the first sleight of hand I learned was 'one handed cut'. It is a basic method of cutting a deck of card with one hand, but it took me about 3 days to master it. The idea of giving up magic had appear in my brain since then, not until the day I performed my first 'ambitious card' to my family member, they were all shocked by the trick, in that moment , the look in their faces made my heart swelled. "You never understood why we did this. The audience knows the truth: the world is simple. It's miserable, solid all the way through. But if you could fool them, even for a second, then you can make them wonder, and then you... then you got to see something really special. You really don't know? It was... it was the look on their faces..." said Robert Angier from 'The Prestige'. This is the most precious thing I have learned in this "3 month chapter".

This is edited one, but i think its too long (784 words), is it okay? is there any part that is redundant
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