asadasad
Sep 22, 2015
Undergraduate / Essay on my religion - my story. [6]
Hi guys i need your help could any of you proof read my essay and tell the mistakes and if you have any suggestions/ideas for me to add in please do tell me so. Here it is:
Okay so i want to start my story with people first because i think their are the most importent reasons why i am the person now. so the first question i want to start with is who are the three people i would not think of knowing. andthose people are my b and my two friends is isaiah ad chris because of these three i am who i am now.and the second question is simular its out of those three people, if you had to pick the one you needed the most who would it be?it would be hard to chose from all hree of them but the most needed/important for me me would be my BBB because he understands me the best and is always beside me.so the thrid question who do you fight the most with and again it would be my b because you fight with the person who you care the most for.fourth question if i ould go back in time to be with a person from my past i havnt seen anymore would my friend evan because we were in the same grade from grade 1 to grade 5 and we had made great memories.lets move on next question is who is the person who most challenges me to be better than i am now would be my b because he is the source of my motavation , he forces me to try and try. that was for my first part now i want to go into ito places so the first question in places is what is the most beautiful place that touches me the most in this world. I think there are a lot of beautiful place but the mos beautiful place that i like is any religous place.seond question what place do you go to outside of your home to be alone at peace. The place i usally go to is the park or evn the library because its peaceful and quite and it far from where i live so no one i know goes there so i dont have to talk to anyone.the thrid question is where i use to hide when i was five. i use to hide in different spots like the closet, a box, in the cabinet under the tv but the place i usally used to go was a portacabin at a narrow ditch we used to play/hide in. and the last topic is events and theres only one question i want to talk about so the question is what choices have you made so far that have made a real difference. One of my choice that had made a real difference was to stay with my friends even if they were igroned in other words scoity outcast. that was it for my story.
Hi guys i need your help could any of you proof read my essay and tell the mistakes and if you have any suggestions/ideas for me to add in please do tell me so. Here it is:
Okay so i want to start my story with people first because i think their are the most importent reasons why i am the person now. so the first question i want to start with is who are the three people i would not think of knowing. andthose people are my b and my two friends is isaiah ad chris because of these three i am who i am now.and the second question is simular its out of those three people, if you had to pick the one you needed the most who would it be?it would be hard to chose from all hree of them but the most needed/important for me me would be my BBB because he understands me the best and is always beside me.so the thrid question who do you fight the most with and again it would be my b because you fight with the person who you care the most for.fourth question if i ould go back in time to be with a person from my past i havnt seen anymore would my friend evan because we were in the same grade from grade 1 to grade 5 and we had made great memories.lets move on next question is who is the person who most challenges me to be better than i am now would be my b because he is the source of my motavation , he forces me to try and try. that was for my first part now i want to go into ito places so the first question in places is what is the most beautiful place that touches me the most in this world. I think there are a lot of beautiful place but the mos beautiful place that i like is any religous place.seond question what place do you go to outside of your home to be alone at peace. The place i usally go to is the park or evn the library because its peaceful and quite and it far from where i live so no one i know goes there so i dont have to talk to anyone.the thrid question is where i use to hide when i was five. i use to hide in different spots like the closet, a box, in the cabinet under the tv but the place i usally used to go was a portacabin at a narrow ditch we used to play/hide in. and the last topic is events and theres only one question i want to talk about so the question is what choices have you made so far that have made a real difference. One of my choice that had made a real difference was to stay with my friends even if they were igroned in other words scoity outcast. that was it for my story.