Writing Feedback / Food revolution - and how the change impact on people's lives - IELTS essay [5]

Hello everybody, i'm a senior of University of Foreign Language from Da Nang, Viet Nam. Next month, i am going to take IELTS exam and I'm not confident with my writing skill. Hope you will give me a helping hand with some suggestions to improve my skill

Nowadays food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live ?
You should give reasons for your answer using your own ideas and experience ?

Revolutions on many aspects of life have changed the world as well as people's life styles. The development in food industry is an example, food are now easier to set up by applying technology to the assembly line. I agree partially with this statement, prepared food doesn't bring us only the advantages but it has its own negative effect.

The main reason that can be seen by every person is that the positive effect of prepared food, simply because it's convenience. In this hectic life, people usually favour a convenient way to have a meal rather than traditional way in order not to waste time. So that fast food and canned food are the best choice playing a crucial role in many people's lives. They not only provide them calories but also help them to save time. For instance, Americans often have burgers for their lunch time so as not to late for work.

On the other hand, there are also a sizeable percentage of people who strongly believe that prepared food is not good for our health, it is even the main cause of some serious diseases. Firstly, fast food is set up with some quick process like : frying, grilling. These method make food lose nutrition and turn them into another matter that harm our health. Last but not least, the preservative in canned food is also the top factor that lead to bad result such as : cancer.

Based on the above discussion and analysis, we can see that the change in the way preparing food have not only positive but also negative effect on people's lives.