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'the choice to change the world' Spelman College Transfer Essay [11]
I've been working on this essay for some time and always find myself starting over again. Spelman is my dream school and I got deferred and later on denied last year...any help with my essay is greatly appreciated. I have an idea of what I am trying to get it to be like but my thoughts are all over the place.
Prompt:
In determining who may enroll at Spelman as a transfer student, faculty review each application and essay. Please share with our faculty why you would be an outstanding student in their classes, discuss your college experience thus far and provide your reason for wanting to transfer to Spelman College.exceptional privileges for an outstanding student
At Spelman College, women are given the choice to change the world. I aspire to change the world throughout various minority communities upon gaining knowledge from such a prestigious institution. Spelman College breeds illustrious women who are willing to take on the torch and continue to light the flame that keeps on burning. I too, aspire to do the same.
Throughout my first full-time semester in college, I learned to take on the torch. I learned to allow the flame to continue to burn in the midst of my hands, making me accountable for everything that I do. Through my rough days, I learned to not let this flame burn me, but instead control it by pushing myself far beyond whatever limits my mind could forego.
A year ago, I was denied from Spelman College and instead of being discouraged, I used this moment to rekindle my flame. I had to take a step away from who I was and look towards who I wanted to become. I refused to become another sob story that did not get accepted into their dream school due to lack of motivation and performance. Instead, I decided to become motivation for other young girls by being a prime example of the saying "it's not where you start, it's where you finish".
After April 2, 2016; determination was the only thing that kept me going. Two weeks after graduating from high school, I enrolled myself at a community college not too far from my home, despite getting into nine other schools I had applied to. Instead of taking a gap year, I decided to make 2016 my "comeback" year; and I must say, I was on point.
I began my fall semester at a 4.0 gpa after taking a difficult condensed nine-week math course. Soon after, fall semester began and I took twelve credits. On top of working part-time, volunteering, being involved in church activities, and working out, I was also a full-time student. In the midst of everything going on around me, I managed to stay focused and finished my first semester with all A's and one C.
Looking back at my educational journey thus far, I cannot help but be grateful for the admission decision that was made for me during that time period. During that time, I was battling a numerous amount of personal problems ranging from suicide attempts to depression as a result of the loss of my child. Losing my son sent me in a downward spiral in which I felt as though I had nothing else to look forward to in life. I had truly lost sight of my dreams, hopes, and aspirations. Getting denied from Spelman is what allowed me to re-evaluate my life and I am forever grateful.
I would be an outstanding student at Spelman because I have learned that I cannot be an average performer and expect exceptional privileges. Attending Spelman College is a privilege that only the cream of the crop can experience. I believe that my first semester in college has proven to myself and others that I am no longer "average". Despite my failures in life thus far, I have found it within myself to keep pushing forward regardless of my circumstances.
