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MWC

Jan 31, 2017

Undergraduate / I belong to the community of honor guard members [5]

@Holt
Sorry about that, I hadn't noticed.
Prompt : Everyone belongs to many different communities and/or groups defined by (among other things) shared geography, religion, ethnicity, income, cuisine, interest, race, ideology, or intellectual heritage. Choose one of the communities to which you belong, and describe that community and your place within it.

MWC

Jan 31, 2017

Graduate / My idea about petroleum. Personal Statement for Graduate Admission [8]

1, Moulded - made by pouring into a hollow container
Molded - to shape a soft, malleable material

2, ... experience while organizing my own, learning to be independent and self-sufficient which will be extremely useful to ...

3, English L language

4, include:

5, I think you can give one or two examples of good books that you have read instead. To be honest, fifteen books in recent years does not sound that impressive - I know people who can read two novels a day.

6, I have had the opportunity to give back to society while meeting the needs of others ...

I advise you to be careful about run on sentences. Some of them are a bit longer than they need to be. Also, I would use society instead of the society. Good essay though, I hope you're accepted.

MWC

Jan 31, 2017

Undergraduate / I belong to the community of honor guard members [5]

Everyone belongs to many different communities and/or groups defined by (among other things) shared

very special network

The community of honor guard members in Taiwan is a very special one. First of all, each honor guard in Taiwan is like a family in itself. As they are usually strict about training and focus largely on teamwork, the members of each class are usually very close, closer than most other clubs in high schools. Other honor guard members have told me that the honor guard is like a second home to them.

The entire network of honor guards, to us, is like a huge extended family. In fact, along with the titles Captain, Secretary and Treasurer, we have a special position, Ambassador, whose purpose is to mingle with other honor guards, learn different honor guard techniques from them, and invite them to all our performances as well as attend theirs.

My own position in the honor guard is nothing special, as I don't hold a title. However, I love the sense of connection within the Taiwanese honor guard community. I love the fact that no matter where I go, if I meet someone from another school's honor guard, we are able to talk and share stories like old friends. I love the support that members of earlier classes give us and how they advise us on everything from schoolwork to relationships to training future honor guard members. Most of all, I love the fact that no matter where I go in my life, there will be a place in the honor guard that will always belong to me.