Undergraduate / "Loading... Loading... Loading..." Common App Personal Essay Prompt 4 [3]

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Essay Prompt 4: Describe a problem you've solved or a problem you'd like to solve. It can be an intellectual challenge, a research query, an ethical dilemma-anything that is of personal importance, no matter the scale. Explain its significance to you and what steps you took or could be taken to identify a solution

Computer fix

"Loading... Loading... Loading...", I stared in disbelief as my computer struggled to simply open the homepage. My computer had always been very slow but that day it was especially so. With each passing second, I pondered how it could even get like that. After what seemed like half an hour I had lost my patience and I decided to figure out what was wrong with it. My initial thought was "Maybe it just has a ton of virus". So I checked for and cleaned any virus' that were on it. However, that didn't seem to change a single thing. I tried updating my computer and clearing up space but, the result was still the same. Looking up solutions on my phone wasn't much help either. Stumped, I noticed that the desktop was rather dusty. I went to open it up to see if maybe I needed to clean it. What I saw pretty much confirmed that suspicion. As soon as I opened the case, millions of tiny particles started flying out, causing me to cough. Looking inside I could see the entire desktop was blanketed with grayish brown debris. It was everywhere, the dust probably took up more space inside the case than the actual computer. In fact, the fan looked so enveloped it didn't even seem like it was even able to turn. After wiping it clean of any dust I restarted the computer and tried loading up the homepage again. Surprisingly it seemed to have worked. It only took a couple seconds before it completely loaded up and I had no problems browsing the internet. It was like it was brand new. That day was a notable part of my life. Through the experience, I learned and applied many problem-solving skills. Had I remained content with how slow my computer was I'd probably still be waiting half an hour just to do a simple google search. Or I would have given up and bought another computer. However, by staying resolute and perceptive I was able to fix a problem that had plagued me for months. Not to mention I saved a couple bucks too.