Essays / "I was down with chicken pox" - obstacles/challenges essay [4]

Thanks a lot guys. here's the full prompt
Describe a time when you overcame one or more significant obstacles/challenges so that you were able to improve the lives of others in your community. How did you react to the challenge(s) and what did you learn from the experience? (100-word maximum)

Scholarship / Personal Statement For KGSP. I need a help from who can help and review it. Tell me any editings. [3]

nice write up but on the second to the last paragraph... it's supposed to be my success and excellence are not only in the academic......