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The bar chart illustrates the Biritish male and female employees working in different occupations in 2005.
Overall, the percentage of men workers were dominate in most of job sectors. While there were only 4 fields in which women leaded.
We can see that in the field of skilled-trades, the distance between male and female was greatest with 20% of man and just about 2,5% of women. There was 12% workers choosing the process, plant and machine operattives sector and this proportion had a quite large distance of gender, with figure for man was six-fold higher than for women. The proportion of women in three sector: Manager and senior officials, Professional and Elementary was similalr and also lower than of men. However, the gap of gender was higher in manager and senior officals than two other sectors.
On the other hand, the percentage of female in administrative and sales and customer service secretarial was dominate, about 22% and 14%, respectively, and the same figure for men, at only 5%. This proportion in personal service was six-fold than male. However, the distribution of employment by gender working in associate professional and technical had a litle bit differents, with 15% of female and approximate 11% of male.
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IELTS writing Task 1 : The Employment of Both Sexes by Occupation in UK in 2005
The bar chart illustrates the Biritish male and female employees working in different occupations in 2005.
Overall, the percentage of men workers were dominate in most of job sectors. While there were only 4 fields in which women leaded.
We can see that in the field of skilled-trades, the distance between male and female was greatest with 20% of man and just about 2,5% of women. There was 12% workers choosing the process, plant and machine operattives sector and this proportion had a quite large distance of gender, with figure for man was six-fold higher than for women. The proportion of women in three sector: Manager and senior officials, Professional and Elementary was similalr and also lower than of men. However, the gap of gender was higher in manager and senior officals than two other sectors.
On the other hand, the percentage of female in administrative and sales and customer service secretarial was dominate, about 22% and 14%, respectively, and the same figure for men, at only 5%. This proportion in personal service was six-fold than male. However, the distribution of employment by gender working in associate professional and technical had a litle bit differents, with 15% of female and approximate 11% of male.
Please help me this essay. Thanks you so much!!!
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