Undergraduate / Qualified for English major class. Admission essay to the Tran Hung Dao High School [7]

Long-term goal, steps/process and obstacles

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Obtaining a college degree requires persistence and the ability to stay focused on the end result. Share with us a long-term goal that you had, the steps/process you took to obtain that goal, and how you overcame any obstacles that you encountered. This goal could be academic, personal, or extracurricular in nature (approximately 250 words).

In my hometown, getting admission to Tran Hung Dao High School is the dream of every student as it is the school which has the best studying environment and only accepts exceptionally excellent students. As for myself, I set Tran Hung Dao High School as my goal when I was in grade 7th.

To apply for this school, everyone has to choose up to three subjects for major subject tests, followed by three compulsory tests which are Math, English and Literature. As for myself, I chose Math as my major since I have always had a passion for this subject. Due to high requirements and an immense number of applications of other students from different cities, being accepted to Tran Hung Dao has never been easy, which is why I had to put forth my best efforts or else I would be kicked out of the line.

What concerned me the most was not the major subject test, which mostly determines the final result, but the compulsory English test. When I was in grade 7th, my English was terribly awful. I realized that I needed to improve my English skills in order to get a place at this school. Since I did not have a firm English foundation, self-studying was almost impossible. Therefore, I had to attend extra English class. I began with basic English exercises which were provided by my tutor. I started to watch foreign channels such as National Geographic Channel and Disney Channel so that I could improve my listening skills and get used to the use of English of native speakers. Apart from English, I also tried to develop my Math skills to meet the school's requirement.

My English was significantly improved over the time. In grade 8th, I was capable of practicing with advanced English tests and reading English news. In grade 9th, I started to have interest in this subject and decided English would be my second major. And eventually, I got accepted in both Math and English majors, but I chose to be an English major student as I had acknowledged the importance of English for my future.

Being qualified for English major class was a real surprise to me. I consider this as my biggest achievement as I put all my time and effort and finally attained a result which exceeded my expectation.

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