Undergraduate / Anyone feel free to Critique my Waterloo AIF for Management Engineering - application form [3]

Hi, I'm just looking for feed back for my AIF. Anyone is welcome to critique it.

Admission Information Form for Waterloo

Question 1: Reasons for choosing your program and Waterloo
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I chose to apply to Waterloo because the powerful entrepreneurship culture stood out to me. The world is an inefficient machine, and Waterloo has been known internationally to create innovative minds that make it more efficient. Each program at Waterloo serves the different needs of different entrepreneurs. My passion for problem solving, optimization, and business drew me towards management engineering and computer science. Both programs will allow me to grow my passions by teaching me how to create complex and efficient algorithms to help with real world issues. In addition to growing my passions, both programs offer co-op placements where I can gain practical experience and knowledge simultaneously.

Question 3: Extracurricular Activities - additional information (optional)
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In grade 11, I joined my school's FIRST Robotics rookie team. In our first year, we made it to the World's championship and won over 8 awards. During the 6 week build period, I was co mechanical, electrical, and design team lead where I designed, prototyped, and built the robot. I used my innovative thinking to design and build the bumpers, climbing mechanism, and powertrain. At the competitions, I fixed the robot, strategized with teams, and was interviewed by judges. For last year's initiatives, I was made this years Captain to lead with my strong leadership and communication skills.

ENGINEERING Question 1: Engineering Interests and Goals
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My interest in engineering roots from my passion for making things more efficient. Through FIRST Robotics I have learnt that you can make a system more efficient by building upon what you already have rather than wasting time and resources to create something new. During Waterloo's open house and shadow day, I met with students, alumni, and professors from computer, software, systems design, and management engineering. While each program did cater to my passions, management engineering stood out in particular as it is heavily focused on optimization and problem solving and not necessarily on creating something new. Much like the work done by Waterloo's Management Science professor, Ken Mckay, and his team at Oculys with their hospital wait time program where they take all their current resources and predict the amount of time it will take for a doctor to see the patient.