Writing Feedback / WRITING TASK 1(US consumers' average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone) [NEW]

Thank you for giving me advice about this writing. Your comments will be really useful to me. Thanks a lot

The graph below shows US consumers' average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010.

Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words. The graph below shows US consumers' average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010.

Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.

The given line graph illustrates the yearly spending on mobile phone and landline phone services in the USA over a decade from 2001. A cursory glance at the chart is enough to show that the spending of mobile users showed an upward trend as opposed to the steady decrease in residential services consumers.

In the beginning year, that was in 2001, while the customer on fixed-line service reached the highest point at approximately 8700 dollars, the cellular services stayed at 200 dollars, the lowest figure in the whole period.

Regarding the following years, there was a marginal rise in mobile phone consumers which skyrocketed in 2010 with a fourfold jump relative to its initial figure in the beginning year. Meanwhile, the expenditure on landline services dropped steeply to 400 dollars which means it declined by 300 dollars from 2001 to 2010. Furthermore, a significant figure can be incidentally observed in 2006 when two services both hit exactly 500 dollars.

Writing Feedback / Will society be able to cope with the growing number of elderly people. How can it be managed? [3]

aging population brings many problems

in this day and age, many developed nations have experienced a substantial increase in life expectancy which puts a heavy burden on the healthcare system as well as the government. Because of that, I firmly believe this issue is not regarded as an easy problem to handle.

It is indisputable that the middle-aged groups are more likely to be related to chronic diseases resulting in the growing usage of pharmaceutical and costly special treatments. Consequently, the government needs to allocate a large budget to the healthcare system attempting to meet the aging population's demands. However, this investment could cause shortfalls in other areas such as the economy and education. Hence, This change in the distribution of money can impact society negatively.

There is a multitude of solutions that the government should take into account. About the former, predicting the changing demographic situations in their countries and plan accordingly will be helpful speculation for all possible eventualities. Additionally, money management courses should be put forward to raise people's awareness of how important money is and how to save it properly. In this way, those who no longer earn any money could get access to basic amenities including accommodation, food, and medical care without depending on their family or the government.

All in all, the aging population has been receiving a great deal of public attention as it affects economic growth and many aspects. The government, therefore, implement promptly the above-mentioned solutions to tackle the rising number of senior citizens