Hien N
Jun 15, 2018
Writing Feedback / The number of graduates and postgradutes in Britain in terms of the work they did after study [2]
The given bar charts compare the number of graduates and postgradutes in Britain in terms of the work they did after they had finished their study at college excluding full-time job in 2008.
It is clear that UK graduates who didn't have a full-time work were likely to continue their study after leaving college. Further study was the most common choice for both groups, while only a small quantity of UK leavers chose voluntary to work after graduating.
In 2008, the number of UK graduates deciding to study further was highest, at 29,665. Meanwhile, only 2,725 postgradutes chose to continue to take a course in Britain. Voluntary was the least prevalent option for both groups ,with only 3,500 and 345 people deciding to work this activity respectively.
In the same year,the quantity of UK graduates getting a part-time job stood at 17,735 students, whereas the figure for UK postgradutes was significantly lower, at 2,535. There was 16,235 graduates who were jobless in Britain, exceeding the number of UK postgradutes , whÃch had only 1,625.
Please correct my paragraph If I have mistakes. And let me know which band score I can get in this essay. Thanks in advance.
Destination of UK graduates and postgradutes in 2008
The given bar charts compare the number of graduates and postgradutes in Britain in terms of the work they did after they had finished their study at college excluding full-time job in 2008.
It is clear that UK graduates who didn't have a full-time work were likely to continue their study after leaving college. Further study was the most common choice for both groups, while only a small quantity of UK leavers chose voluntary to work after graduating.
In 2008, the number of UK graduates deciding to study further was highest, at 29,665. Meanwhile, only 2,725 postgradutes chose to continue to take a course in Britain. Voluntary was the least prevalent option for both groups ,with only 3,500 and 345 people deciding to work this activity respectively.
In the same year,the quantity of UK graduates getting a part-time job stood at 17,735 students, whereas the figure for UK postgradutes was significantly lower, at 2,535. There was 16,235 graduates who were jobless in Britain, exceeding the number of UK postgradutes , whÃch had only 1,625.
Please correct my paragraph If I have mistakes. And let me know which band score I can get in this essay. Thanks in advance.
