Scholarship / Master in Political Science (Mongolia) - What are your plans when you finish your studies? [3]

Dear all. I am applying for a scholarship in Political Science and came to this question. Please review my work. I really want to receive this award. Any comment and suggestion are more than welcome. Thank you for your time. REALLY! Its Masters program.

stabilization and democracy in mongolia

As developing country like Mongolia, professional human resources are needed to secure a healthy democracy. In rapid growth of globalization, Mongolian government should not be on standby but be a player. I want to contribute in political stabilization and in healthy democracy. Knowledge gained from this award will be put into best use for sharing it and contributing in governance. Advising has always been my strong skill so I wish to use my skill and knowledge for the better growth in my country.

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