Writing Feedback / (TOEFL) Maintain a small number of friends over long time or make new friends easily [5]

@yui meow
Hey there,
What I like about your essay is, how you structured the text. It is easy to follow your arguments. Another thing that I like is how you used linking words like "Furthermore", "To start with" or "Although".

Because you are preparing for TOEFL, I do recommend that you try to extend your essay. Now you used 339 words. Try to make it 400-500.

But all in all, a good essay as far as I can say.