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katori

Oct 3, 2019

Writing Feedback / How the Australian Bureau of Meteorology gathers up-to-the minute information on the climate [3]

Thank for your most trustable feedback@Maria
Even when I'm writing the body of this task, I still get confused how am I gonna manage and dig the information as details as possible. But it seem that I only lack of details ( cause i lack of vocabs to describe it), I will working on it , also change "eventually" to "finally" seem it fitter and have more comlex sentences to describle the whole idea in the most particular way as it could. Iam looking further every feedbacks of your as it make me comple my writing skill and also me :). Adios

katori

Oct 2, 2019

Writing Feedback / How the Australian Bureau of Meteorology gathers up-to-the minute information on the climate [3]

Writing task 1 from practice test 2 ( Cam 1 )

Please give me a feedback about my writing, I'm self-studying and willing to enhance my skill

The figure illustrates how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology gathers up-to-the minute information on the climate in order to manufacture truthful forecasts. Overall, there are eight steps, beginning with the incoming information from satellite and ending with broadcast.

As you can observe from the first step,in order to get a data to be analysed and forecasted,the information have to be gathered exactly as possible on every single minute about the climate.Which comes from a satellite, a radar and a drifting buoy. Then, all the data that have been gathered are sent to headquarter,which is Australian Bureau of Meteorology as satellite photos, radar screens, synoptic charts where it going to be analyzed and manufactured into truthful information. After this, the most reliable information that have been produced, will be prepared on computer to forecast. Eventually, the information will come to entire Australian's spectators via television's news, radio and recorded announcement from telephone.

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