Undergraduate / Application statement engineer (avionics) [6]

Hi guys...I'd like to present by barely-written statement of purpose for applying at a university for a course...engineering to be exact and asking for help because I'm not really sure whether it is written okay or bad ...supposed to write 4000 signs including spaces (ucas) ...please excuse my mistakes and help me to correct them...tried to avoid them :-)

SOP

It is indeed a great pleasure for me to write this statement to explain about my interests and to share my inspirations and career goals.

During my school years in Germany, my interest in mathematics and physics grew beyond set standards, which I believe is because of my inherent curiosity for discovering new questions, finding answers and exploring chances for comprehensibility of advanced technical know-how. Alongside various interest fields, my fascination for issues concerning the rapidly developing aviation technology and industry always occupied a superior position.

Besides taking lessons at school to achieve a successful conclusion, I voluntary participated a highly prestigious course in applied mathematics led by a university professor. After passing a difficult test asking for high educational standards, I was allowed to solve arithmetical problems along with a band of students and alumni and gain additional, valuable knowledge for prospective studies.

Being allowed to take part in a student exchange offered by my secondary school, I attended lectures at the Lycée Le Castel in Dijon as a foreign student. Gaining experience by living and studying in a unfamiliar country and encountering new challenges has been a valuable lesson I don't want to miss. Because of several visits in the British Kingdom, being acquainted with the british culture became natural. I am fully aware of differences and difficulties in living and learning between England and Germany and sure to be capable of coping them.

After completing secondary education and receiving the Certificate for Overall Maturity for Higher Education, I completed the compulsory military service , the so-called Grundwehrdienst. During this period, lasting nine months in Germany, I had, besides recognizing the value of companionship and exceeding individual limits, the infrequent opportunity to work with ingenious military communication systems. To become acquainted with advanced capabilities of computer based data acquisition and processing, was one of the multifarious qualifications I gained.

Longing to work in a profession that assures security for human lives in a fast evolving technology branch aquires dedication and diligence I am more than willing to fulfill. That is the reason for me to learn and to bring my knowledge of aviation and electronics to the highest available stage. In order to obtain these standards and, additionally, archieving them in the common language for global communication, I'm applying for a bachelor degree course offered by a english university.

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besides I think sth is missing there but I don't know what...well when there is someone who might help me please do so

Greetings
C.