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Oct 22, 2019
Writing Feedback / [IELTS Writing Part 1] Making coffee at industrial level - all the process described [2]
Hello! I'm glad I came across with this helpful forum for me to get feedbacks for my writing. Please evaluate my ielts part 1 essay below. I appreciate your feedback.
Description:
My Essay,
The illustration gives information about the several steps on how to produce a coffee.
As can be seen, the picture showed 11 stages that need to be accomplished before coffee is available for consumption. Beginning from harvesting the coffee beans from its source and ending at the packing stage.
To begin with the process, the coffee beans are harvested by hand before being dried under the sun. The dried beans will then be roasted within a container which will be cooled down immediately afterwards to make the beans as hard as it can be. A grinding machine will then be used to break down the beans into smaller pieces before being mixed with hot water.
The last part of the process will proceed by freezing the mixture after it was strained to remove excess deposits. The frozen liquid will be crushed into powdery substance by utilizing the grinding machine before placing it in a vacuum container to make it dry by removing any trace of water. The finished product will then go to the packing section to make coffee jars ready for sale.
Hello! I'm glad I came across with this helpful forum for me to get feedbacks for my writing. Please evaluate my ielts part 1 essay below. I appreciate your feedback.
Description:
The diagram shows the process of making coffee.
My Essay,
The illustration gives information about the several steps on how to produce a coffee.
As can be seen, the picture showed 11 stages that need to be accomplished before coffee is available for consumption. Beginning from harvesting the coffee beans from its source and ending at the packing stage.
To begin with the process, the coffee beans are harvested by hand before being dried under the sun. The dried beans will then be roasted within a container which will be cooled down immediately afterwards to make the beans as hard as it can be. A grinding machine will then be used to break down the beans into smaller pieces before being mixed with hot water.
The last part of the process will proceed by freezing the mixture after it was strained to remove excess deposits. The frozen liquid will be crushed into powdery substance by utilizing the grinding machine before placing it in a vacuum container to make it dry by removing any trace of water. The finished product will then go to the packing section to make coffee jars ready for sale.
