Kerfuffin
Oct 19, 2009
Kerfuffin
Oct 17, 2009
Undergraduate / Love of Programming and UCs [4]
Hi everyone. I'm applying to the UCs and would like some help on my first prompt
Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations
When I was much younger, I was fascinated with computers and other electronics. I played outside with all the other children, but I was also quite content to stay inside and tinker with a computer with my father. I always thought computers would be a nice hobby, but in middle school that all changed.
Sometime around seventh or eighth grade I fell in love with computers. I was in a class to prepare for a mathematics competition, MathCounts. We had the fancy, new TI-84+ Silver Edition calculators, of which I had never seen anything like. My friends showed me the programming function of the calculator and I was immediately enthralled.
Not too long after I was creating basic sentence generators on my calculator. From there I asked my father and grandfather more about computers and programming them. We looked around the library and on the internet, and found the Basic and C++ languages for download. My grandfather mailed me some books for coding in each language which I used to expand my knowledge of these languages.
When I reached high school I chose to leave the majority of my friends and go to the technology magnet school in Las Vegas, A-Tech. The school had a great computer programming track and I loved it. Taking a course with people who wanted the same thing I did and who were just as knowledgeable as I made me more enamored with computer science than before.
When I moved to Brentwood, a San Francisco suburb, there was no computer science available to take right away. I kept myself 'in practice' by continuing to code in my free time. The beginning of my junior year I chose to take classes in HTML and Visual BASIC. I really enjoyed both and decided to graduate high school with a certificate saying I completed many courses in the Computer Science and Engineering field.
Growing up in the Age of Technology has given the world as a whole, and me, many advantages. I hope to see computers play a more powerful role in the world. I hope to help become a part of this Age of Technology by studying Computer Science and Engineering in the UC system.
Hi everyone. I'm applying to the UCs and would like some help on my first prompt
Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations
When I was much younger, I was fascinated with computers and other electronics. I played outside with all the other children, but I was also quite content to stay inside and tinker with a computer with my father. I always thought computers would be a nice hobby, but in middle school that all changed.
Sometime around seventh or eighth grade I fell in love with computers. I was in a class to prepare for a mathematics competition, MathCounts. We had the fancy, new TI-84+ Silver Edition calculators, of which I had never seen anything like. My friends showed me the programming function of the calculator and I was immediately enthralled.
Not too long after I was creating basic sentence generators on my calculator. From there I asked my father and grandfather more about computers and programming them. We looked around the library and on the internet, and found the Basic and C++ languages for download. My grandfather mailed me some books for coding in each language which I used to expand my knowledge of these languages.
When I reached high school I chose to leave the majority of my friends and go to the technology magnet school in Las Vegas, A-Tech. The school had a great computer programming track and I loved it. Taking a course with people who wanted the same thing I did and who were just as knowledgeable as I made me more enamored with computer science than before.
When I moved to Brentwood, a San Francisco suburb, there was no computer science available to take right away. I kept myself 'in practice' by continuing to code in my free time. The beginning of my junior year I chose to take classes in HTML and Visual BASIC. I really enjoyed both and decided to graduate high school with a certificate saying I completed many courses in the Computer Science and Engineering field.
Growing up in the Age of Technology has given the world as a whole, and me, many advantages. I hope to see computers play a more powerful role in the world. I hope to help become a part of this Age of Technology by studying Computer Science and Engineering in the UC system.
Kerfuffin
Oct 13, 2009
Undergraduate / Uclers and football-UCs essay [8]
thanks a lot again. I have another one that i think fits much better that i wrote over my spring break that ill put up once i give it another comb over.
thanks a lot again. I have another one that i think fits much better that i wrote over my spring break that ill put up once i give it another comb over.
Kerfuffin
Oct 6, 2009
Undergraduate / Uclers and football-UCs essay [8]
Here comes the first UC promt now
Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.
Growing up in a suburb of Chicago, I lived with many benefits. We had one of the best libraries in the nation, our schools were safe and well staffed, and sports and other outside activities were rampant. Life was good in our little suburb of Naperville. I really loved it there and thought I would want to never live anywhere else.
I lived in Naperville until I was nearly 12 years old. I had a hard time adjusting to my new life in Las Vegas. Everything had changed for me. The library was a small one room area with only a few hundred books, the schools did not provide me with challenges, nor did they provide sports until high school. I felt with the change I had to change too; and in some ways I did need to. However I resisted the changes. I did not want to adapt to my new and foreign environment. I withdrew for a while, but did not enjoy much. I had enjoyed football in Illinois; I connected with my friends, and made new ones. So I decided to play again in Las Vegas. It was an enjoyable experience, and brought me back into the world again.
I did end up changing to Las Vegas right around the time we moved again. I moved back to another small suburb, this time near San Francisco, Brentwood. I knew I could adapt better with football. There was some trouble changing, but I was able to change quickly knowing I could do what I enjoyed; football.
Football has helped me adapt to any situation for the better. If something is 'too hard' I compare it to the challenges I have had to overcome in football, and they seem lesser. Moving changed how I felt about myself and others, and football helped me turn those feelings around. The moves, along with football have allowed me to push myself to succeed and adapt to any and all situations I find myself in.
not too sure if it answers the whole thing, but i gave it a shot, its still pretty rough so any more help would be appreciated.
Here comes the first UC promt now
Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.
Growing up in a suburb of Chicago, I lived with many benefits. We had one of the best libraries in the nation, our schools were safe and well staffed, and sports and other outside activities were rampant. Life was good in our little suburb of Naperville. I really loved it there and thought I would want to never live anywhere else.
I lived in Naperville until I was nearly 12 years old. I had a hard time adjusting to my new life in Las Vegas. Everything had changed for me. The library was a small one room area with only a few hundred books, the schools did not provide me with challenges, nor did they provide sports until high school. I felt with the change I had to change too; and in some ways I did need to. However I resisted the changes. I did not want to adapt to my new and foreign environment. I withdrew for a while, but did not enjoy much. I had enjoyed football in Illinois; I connected with my friends, and made new ones. So I decided to play again in Las Vegas. It was an enjoyable experience, and brought me back into the world again.
I did end up changing to Las Vegas right around the time we moved again. I moved back to another small suburb, this time near San Francisco, Brentwood. I knew I could adapt better with football. There was some trouble changing, but I was able to change quickly knowing I could do what I enjoyed; football.
Football has helped me adapt to any situation for the better. If something is 'too hard' I compare it to the challenges I have had to overcome in football, and they seem lesser. Moving changed how I felt about myself and others, and football helped me turn those feelings around. The moves, along with football have allowed me to push myself to succeed and adapt to any and all situations I find myself in.
not too sure if it answers the whole thing, but i gave it a shot, its still pretty rough so any more help would be appreciated.
Kerfuffin
Oct 6, 2009
Undergraduate / Common Application Essay - Holden Caulfield [12]
Holden doesnt end up having sex with her, he just pays her for her time. I think that they would know that too, and if your writing about him, I'd want to be as accurate as possible
Holden doesnt end up having sex with her, he just pays her for her time. I think that they would know that too, and if your writing about him, I'd want to be as accurate as possible
Kerfuffin
Oct 6, 2009
Undergraduate / "find fulfillment in helping others" Looking for critiques on UC admission essay [7]
How are you going to make this into the two required parts.
it is an essay for each section, not one that answers both.
How are you going to make this into the two required parts.
it is an essay for each section, not one that answers both.
Kerfuffin
Oct 6, 2009
Undergraduate / Uclers and football-UCs essay [8]
Thanks a lot for the help :)
will put up the first prompt and revision of the second one once they are done
Thanks a lot for the help :)
will put up the first prompt and revision of the second one once they are done
Kerfuffin
Oct 6, 2009
Undergraduate / Uclers and football-UCs essay [8]
No, that does not bother me that much, what i meant to say was i never thought i would be in a position to coach others, but now that i am, i really do enjoy it
No, that does not bother me that much, what i meant to say was i never thought i would be in a position to coach others, but now that i am, i really do enjoy it
Kerfuffin
Oct 5, 2009
Undergraduate / Uclers and football-UCs essay [8]
This is for the second part of the UC prompt, Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution, or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?
Here it is:
Prompt 2
In January of 2007 I was diagnosed with ulcerative colitis, intestinal ulcers. While it is not as 'glamorous' as cancer or AIDS, it is still painful and debilitating. It took me a while to accept that this had happened to me, and even longer to recover; both physically and mentally. It has broken through my medicine twice thus far, but it has not broken me.
In the time between my recoveries was hard. I had enough energy to go to school and stay awake. However I had to carry on as much as I could. My school work suffered as I tried to control the ulcers, but I persevered through and managed to finish the year well, by passing both my worrisome AP exams.
The ulcers also affected my extracurricular activities as well. I was sick much of the offseason of football between my sophomore and junior years. Due to my weight loss and absences I played JV for a second year. During the season the ulcers struck again, but I played through them for my team. The attack only lasted three weeks, so my play did not suffer too much. Then at the end of the season, I was asked up to varsity for the playoffs, but the ulcers stopped me in my tracks there. I felt bad that I could not help out my team, but there was nothing I could do. I tried to do all I could to improve my game over the offseason. I was looking forwards to my senior year season, when my ulcers hit harder than ever. I spent a week in the hospital, and lost my physical strength and conditioning. I also missed the summer camp and could not make the team. I knew I could not play my senior year, but I still wanted to stay in the game.
When my younger brother signed up for a youth football league I took him to his practice. As it turned out one of my old coaches was his coach as well. He knew about my problem with ulcers and I asked him if I could help out. He agreed almost instantly, and I became a coach for the game I love. While I love playing the game, coaching is another rewarding aspect of the game. Being able to pass down the skills I learned to children to continue the game is a enjoyable experience that I never thought I would experience, however it is now a very enjoyable part of my week.
My ulcers taught me to never give up, no matter the challenge and to keep doing what you love, even if it is not in the way you thought it would or should be. While I wish I never had to deal with these ulcers, I believe they have made me a stronger person overall.
all help/comments are appreciated and needed
thanks for the help. :)
Kevin
This is for the second part of the UC prompt, Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution, or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?
Here it is:
Prompt 2
In January of 2007 I was diagnosed with ulcerative colitis, intestinal ulcers. While it is not as 'glamorous' as cancer or AIDS, it is still painful and debilitating. It took me a while to accept that this had happened to me, and even longer to recover; both physically and mentally. It has broken through my medicine twice thus far, but it has not broken me.
In the time between my recoveries was hard. I had enough energy to go to school and stay awake. However I had to carry on as much as I could. My school work suffered as I tried to control the ulcers, but I persevered through and managed to finish the year well, by passing both my worrisome AP exams.
The ulcers also affected my extracurricular activities as well. I was sick much of the offseason of football between my sophomore and junior years. Due to my weight loss and absences I played JV for a second year. During the season the ulcers struck again, but I played through them for my team. The attack only lasted three weeks, so my play did not suffer too much. Then at the end of the season, I was asked up to varsity for the playoffs, but the ulcers stopped me in my tracks there. I felt bad that I could not help out my team, but there was nothing I could do. I tried to do all I could to improve my game over the offseason. I was looking forwards to my senior year season, when my ulcers hit harder than ever. I spent a week in the hospital, and lost my physical strength and conditioning. I also missed the summer camp and could not make the team. I knew I could not play my senior year, but I still wanted to stay in the game.
When my younger brother signed up for a youth football league I took him to his practice. As it turned out one of my old coaches was his coach as well. He knew about my problem with ulcers and I asked him if I could help out. He agreed almost instantly, and I became a coach for the game I love. While I love playing the game, coaching is another rewarding aspect of the game. Being able to pass down the skills I learned to children to continue the game is a enjoyable experience that I never thought I would experience, however it is now a very enjoyable part of my week.
My ulcers taught me to never give up, no matter the challenge and to keep doing what you love, even if it is not in the way you thought it would or should be. While I wish I never had to deal with these ulcers, I believe they have made me a stronger person overall.
all help/comments are appreciated and needed
thanks for the help. :)
Kevin