Undergraduate / 'Not settling for medicore any more' - UF ESSAY meaningful experience [7]

In the space provided, please write a concise narrative in which you describe a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment in your life and how it will affect your college experience or your contribution to the UF campus community. You may want to reflect on your ideas about student responsibility, academic integrity, campus citizenship or a call to service.

OUTSIDE! OUTSIDE! My outside hitter slammed the ball into a hole in the other teams defense. AYY! The crowd rushed the court. I fell on my knees, completely wiped out, and screamed with joy. My team had just won the Korean State Volleyball Tournament. The final third game was a hard fought battle with 11 match points (in volleyball the team has to win by two points). That moment I realized that hard work can really pay off in the end. For the first time in my life I felt as though I could do anything if I put my mind to it. I have always thought it was just a clichï that adults tell kids to try to motivate them. But in that surreal moment, I realized even if all odds are against you concentration and commitment can help surmount what seems impregnable tasks or goals.

I beamed into the camera as my picture was taken for the newspaper with the championship trophy and the tournament director. I lead the tournament in assists and was second in blocks and aces. In the final match, victory seemed unyielding. My team was down by two and the other team was at match point. As the opposing team's hitter came to slam in their victory, I came up at the last second for a one handed block to pump up my team and rally them to victory. In my life, I have played in hundreds of volleyball games, but the final points of this game will forever be etched on my mind.

This victory has changed my outlook on life. I used to just settle for mediocre. I used to ignore the people who are better than me, but I boosted my confidence by thinking of those that are worse than me. I convinced myself that those who were better were just more committed or just naturally smarter and better than me. I was content with living an intermediate life. But now I realized that now I could be at the top. I could be one of those people that I used to ignore. Now when I see people doing a better job, I would strive to try to keep up with them or maybe even hope to surpass their achievements.

The prestigious University of Florida is made up of thousands of the top, elite students of the nation. The scholars and prodigious professors can help stimulate and forge a path to success. My newfound confidence can instigate an academic passion for progress. My time at UF will be the stepping-stones for my path in life. Your institution can provide the tools and knowledge necessary for prosperity. I will genuinely contribute much of my energy to the progression of your university. As one of the top universities of the world, why would I want to settle for anything less than the great GATOR NATION.

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