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May 23, 2020
Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing -- Are the older generations' ideas still useful nowadays? [3]
Hi dear members, I wrote an IELTS essay and I am not sure if all expressions, sentences and words are proper enough.
The older generations tend to have very traditional ideas about how people should live, think and behave. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
People are discussing whether advice and ideas given by elder generations are still useful nowadays, in my opinion, indeed, some old opinions are still working for now, but with the era changing, new ideas for modern life should not be neglected either.
On the one hand, old suggestions and advice reflects many splendid characteristics. For example, old opinions that people are supposed to work hard and earn by themselves reflect the importance of being diligent and hard-working. That kind of opinion is a symbol of self-restricting and higher ethical standards which are not allowed to be abandoned by us. What's more, old opinions are always tested by years and years. May be sort of them express an outdated and conservating value system, but a lot of them are trying to guide people for an easier life without useless discovery of faults and mistakes. To conclude, some of the old opinions should be reserved and the younger generation are supposed to follow.
On the other hand, some of them are not suitable for modern life nowadays. Firstly, with eras changing, the society nowadays resembles a little it used to be. In modern life, citizens are more arguing for freedom, diversity and creative ideas, but not old conservatism. That's why many twitters expressing traditional value systems are declined and criticised by young people on the Internet, considering the total disagreement of old views on women, children and occupations. Besides, many traditional ideas express discrimination bout identities, salaries and classes. One vivid examplar is that the famous case of American married gay couple being refused to reserve wedding cake from a cakeshop. This traditional and provincial value system was criticised and the couple sued the shop to the supreme court of the States. To conclude, I argue that not every traditional ideas should be accepted by people nowadays.
In conclusion, although old opinions and ideas sometimes are symbols of ethical standards and well-experienced, people's value system should not be restricted by provincial ideas but distinguishing various views and try to find out suitable ones.
THANK YOU!!
opinions and ideas of elder generation
Hi dear members, I wrote an IELTS essay and I am not sure if all expressions, sentences and words are proper enough.
The older generations tend to have very traditional ideas about how people should live, think and behave. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
People are discussing whether advice and ideas given by elder generations are still useful nowadays, in my opinion, indeed, some old opinions are still working for now, but with the era changing, new ideas for modern life should not be neglected either.
On the one hand, old suggestions and advice reflects many splendid characteristics. For example, old opinions that people are supposed to work hard and earn by themselves reflect the importance of being diligent and hard-working. That kind of opinion is a symbol of self-restricting and higher ethical standards which are not allowed to be abandoned by us. What's more, old opinions are always tested by years and years. May be sort of them express an outdated and conservating value system, but a lot of them are trying to guide people for an easier life without useless discovery of faults and mistakes. To conclude, some of the old opinions should be reserved and the younger generation are supposed to follow.
On the other hand, some of them are not suitable for modern life nowadays. Firstly, with eras changing, the society nowadays resembles a little it used to be. In modern life, citizens are more arguing for freedom, diversity and creative ideas, but not old conservatism. That's why many twitters expressing traditional value systems are declined and criticised by young people on the Internet, considering the total disagreement of old views on women, children and occupations. Besides, many traditional ideas express discrimination bout identities, salaries and classes. One vivid examplar is that the famous case of American married gay couple being refused to reserve wedding cake from a cakeshop. This traditional and provincial value system was criticised and the couple sued the shop to the supreme court of the States. To conclude, I argue that not every traditional ideas should be accepted by people nowadays.
In conclusion, although old opinions and ideas sometimes are symbols of ethical standards and well-experienced, people's value system should not be restricted by provincial ideas but distinguishing various views and try to find out suitable ones.
THANK YOU!!