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Dec 11, 2020
Writing Feedback / [IELTS Writing task 1] Diagram: The changes of a cinema from 1980 until now. [2]
Please give me some advice for my essay, thank you in advance.
The following diagrams illustrate several changes in the structure of a cinema in the period of 1980 up to now. In general, empty spaces in the cinema hall in 1980 are being reconstructed by adding more cinema. In detail, in 1980, the car park was located on the north side, behind the cinema. The ticket office, which can be seen on the first right after passing the entrance, stood next to the drinks area. Cinema 1, stayed at the bottom left corner, was smaller in size compared to Cinema 2 on the right. Until now, the old car park was replaced to expand the cinema acreages. Inside the cinema, the food & drinks area and relax room is being located in the area of old cinema 1. The DVD room now opens next to the ticket office. More cinemas are being added, which separate the hall into 2 parts with 2 on the left and others 3 on the right. And the toilet still remained its own position on the middle left of the cinema.
Please give me some advice for my essay, thank you in advance.
changes in the structure of a cinema
The following diagrams illustrate several changes in the structure of a cinema in the period of 1980 up to now. In general, empty spaces in the cinema hall in 1980 are being reconstructed by adding more cinema. In detail, in 1980, the car park was located on the north side, behind the cinema. The ticket office, which can be seen on the first right after passing the entrance, stood next to the drinks area. Cinema 1, stayed at the bottom left corner, was smaller in size compared to Cinema 2 on the right. Until now, the old car park was replaced to expand the cinema acreages. Inside the cinema, the food & drinks area and relax room is being located in the area of old cinema 1. The DVD room now opens next to the ticket office. More cinemas are being added, which separate the hall into 2 parts with 2 on the left and others 3 on the right. And the toilet still remained its own position on the middle left of the cinema.
