Undergraduate / Personal statement with a focus on what you learned from and felt during an extracurricular activity [4]

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joining the band to play piano

Please write the personal statement with a focus on what you learned from and felt during curricular and/or extracurricular activities (up to three)
to which you attached meaning and devoted yourself in high school. (within 1500 characters/200words)

I still remember the first time when I walked into the studio and felt the hot air in the packed small room. And I had not realized that it was the first step of a new adventure.

In my first year of high school, I was forced to join the band extracurricular and I felt uneasy because I was not sure of my piano skill. However, that feeling suddenly disappeared when I started playing. Out of 15 participants, I was one of the 7 students selected for the band.

The first team practice felt uncomfortable as I did not know anyone on the team and my skill was not as good. But as time went by, I got closer to my teammates and they helped me to be better. It can be said that I practiced harder than anyone else and even my teacher said that I improved the most. '

In the first competition, we succeed in getting in the top 3. Then, we came second in our second competition. We also won several competitions, even a prestigious competition in Jakarta.

There are many troubles along the way, tears, feelings of insecurity, and lots of arguments. And through this journey, I experienced new things, visited new places, and got to know more people in the industry. Being in a team means that I have to be selfless, more careful, and responsible for my actions. I believe that with hard work and dedication, I can improve in anything as I did in music.