Letters / "Born in Italy" - motivation letter ETH Master program [3]

This is my first draft of a motivation letter. It is my first time writing one so any feedback would be greatly appreciated.

the motivation letter for ETH

This is what I have so far:

Dear Sir or Madam,

First of all, I would like to introduce myself, my name is [name] and I was born on [birthdate] in Italy. I am in my third year of studies towards a bachelor's degree in Computer Science at [University name] and plan to graduate in July 2021. My aim is to work in the field of artificial intelligence, more specifically in a research and development department with the intent of developing new technologies and algorithms capable of having an impact on the real world and improve the quality of life of people around me.

Through my undergraduate years at [University name], I was able to gain an extensive knowledge of computer science and a strong footing in mathematics, but artificial intelligence was by far the subject that fascinated me the most. This motivated me to delve deeper into this field and later on to choose it as my specialization. I strongly believe that artificial intelligence will be pivotal in solving the biggest challenges my generation will face and the Master of Science in Computer Science with a major in Machine Intelligence offered by ETH would allow me to fulfill my career goals, expanding my knowledge in an extremely challenging and competitive environment.

As the degree I am currently pursuing is not focused entirely on artificial intelligence, I jumped at every opportunity to gain experience and deepen my knowledge in this field: I did an internship at a company working in the Data Science field where I developed a system for fraud detection, and I am looking to do an internship later on this year on which my bachelor thesis will be based on, again in the artificial intelligence field.

However, sophisticated knowledge in this field is lacking at my current university and given that my goal is to work with state of the art algorithms and technologies in a research department, my natural choice was ETH Zurich: the high-quality education standards, the many research facilities, and the extremely distinguished faculty members I hope to work with are just some of the factors that motivated me to choose this university.

With my strong enthusiasm and academic background, I am confident to be qualified and able to maintain the high standards required at ETH Zurich, making a significant contribution to the program.

Thank you in advance for your consideration and time. I look forward to your positive response.

Yours faithfully,
[My name]